Three AM

A Poem by Camelle

I woke up with a bad dream

I can't believe with every thing

I don't want to open my eyes

Coz that may become real

I thought of you right away

And decided to just text you and say

The things inside my dream

Just to confirm that everything isn't real

I was wide awake when I saw

The things you said

What happened to your head?

And just like that my heart was ripped with a claw

All I felt was instant pain

I tried to hide all the tears

But it comes out and that's unbelieving

It is pouring like a rain

Three AM it happened fast

Now I am here left with a broken heart

We don't even made it to the start

Now you want me to be one of your past.

© 2014 Camelle

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EternoSol

You could work on your grammar a little. And the sequence is kind of out of place...also if you are writing a poem about love, dreams, pain then it has to be a little more intense. I think you focus on rhyming words more than your emotions. Its okay to not have rhyming words at times, or to not follow a certain rhyme scheme. Your stanzas can be larger than 4 lines or even smaller. You need to focus more on what you want to convey than making it fit a stereotypical format.