love is blind, can you see?

"True love is like ghosts, everyone talks about it, few have seen it." La Rochefoucauld

you left me confused
with broken dreams
my heart feels misused
i remember the screams

i saw you everyday
but quickly turned away
i could not see
how perfect we could be

you told me you loved me
and i wouldn't believe you
you kissed my lips
i wish it were true

Author's Note

I'm not very good at poems, or writing at all for that matter. But i thought i should give it a try

Reviews

[Morgster]

I thought it was good.

[Anna Kay]

You r a GREAT Poet!! I Luved this one. and not all poems do have to rhyme,its just that you like it.
Keep on! great work sir! (never give up! :) )

-Anna Kay Patton

[So Sick of Love]

it was good.

[Liv]

I liked it. Like xxdaynahunnyxx said, poems don't always need to ryhme, overall I liked it. I think the last line was good though.

[CollegeGrammer]

I really liked the last line. I dont think you need to go longer at all. I disagree with the people below me.

[Scarlett Willows]

i liked it.
poems do not always have to rhym or have and rhythem to them. i felt lost with the last line though, it didn't connect as the others did it was just "i wish it were true" i think you should may go on alittle longer to then say i wish it were true. overall i liked it.

[f**k you]

Hmm. I like this Connor. (this is Nicole btw if you didn't know....) Overall it was very sweet. But a couple things, it seems unfinished. I hope you add to this. And the line that says "I saw you everyday" I think could be changed to "everyday I saw you". I think that will make it flow a little better...of course that would sort of change the whole thing...uhhm...well then! I hope you write more. Good job.