End of Story

For the man I loved one thousand times

In the comfort of familiar pines

How you kept me running back into your arms, darling!

There you sat upon a fractured throne

Never said the words I should've known

From the channel most sincere

How quick it broke, how quick it healed

I'd a missed you for nothing but to blame me, darling!

When you make a point to say goodbye

Your sloppy kisses lined with lullabies

Make it difficult to stay alive

For the man, comes an empty silence

Tethered to a hopeless kindness

Well, you strike me but I like it don't you stop now, darling!

Never feel an ounce of shame or pain

For the honeysuckle need the rain

Curse your God and shout your lover's name

Reviews

[Kes]

I can't entirely tell if you intended this to come across a little twisted, but that's how I see it. Don't get me wrong - I LOVE twisted. :)
"fractured throne" is so clever. It makes me think of splintered bones. I like the idea of a throne made out of splintered bones. "sloppy kisses lined with lullabies" is particularly outstanding too. One moment it's dirty, almost rough, the next moment it's gentle and sweet.
I love this poem.
K x

[David Scott]

Love is labeled on so many unlovely relationships... Yet this is reality. Darkness is reality... Makes me think of the phrase, "a Curse on God and die". Never a bright idea. 😏
Strong poetic voice. Vivid art.

[Lexi]

Wow, this is a really nice love story.

[Sami Khalil]

I agree . Nice poem. Thank you for sharing.

[Mark]

Oh! the last lines were perfect.

[Lavon Forkeeps]

This is really good!(: Twisted or not, it makes you think of more than one instance. I can see your thought process, and it's a good one.

[zainul]

Interesting rhyming.
Love it.

[Rachael Day]

You're a great writer. I usually don't like poems about love or romantic relationships but i actually quite enjoyed reading yours. It's very polished and like the other reviewers said, has a little twisted element which i love.

[screamin'ian]

Love it

[dukovan]

some really honest thoughts here. Always love getting a girls perspective on a relationship, it can only help what I can do for mine. I felt her and I in this, really good write.