Silhouettes

Summer is my favorite season

I was born in the hazy heat

In the middle of a black and white city

that never goes to sleep

 

I hear a black crow at my window

her song, it frightens me

hard sandels, and coin medallions

a green dress, and Greek keys

 

The things we wanted they came too fast

and now we're stuck dwelling on the past

 

It would have been a boy, if he was real

and I would have named him Simon or James

I would have cried cause he was yours

He would have had a precious face

 

You have Rubies, Turquiose, and Sapphires,

I just have the moon, and a few pearls

You can light yourself on fire if you want to

and I'll smile at the world

 

So take my hand

and say something simple

you said it plenty when I didn't ask

Go on. Say that you love me

I didn't expect much,

I'm okay with that.

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Wolfwind]

This piece is a wealth of diversity at the same moment, solidly deep and emotional. Each stanza could stand alone, conjuring it's own set of images and feelings. Yet when flowing together they fit together and pulsate with a pondering sadness, at the same time a breeze of hope.
Overall I would have to say that I saw this piece as being about young love, bad choices made to soon, a mellow sort of regret at the same time blanketed by wisdom and the need to keep walking forward.

Beautiful Ink!
Aaron

[R J Askew]

Plaintive and moving. Can feel the city in the first verse. Birth leads on to another birth and then things turn to a sense of loss and accusation at the absence of love. It was ever thus. Sigh. Great write.

[Lydia]

I really loved this. It flowed well, and you used very beautiful words.

[luna11]

wow! :D
this poem is amazing.
I love it, it flows beautifully and it's written so well!
xx

[AK]

Awesome poem

[Luke Ritta]

amazing poem meghan.....really nice images went into my mind after reading your poem
keep up the good work.
:)

[Clockwork]

This poem has a charm about it that is magnetic for me. I think the mix of the forward conversational voice of the speaker and the rich imagery do it for me. The conversational lines carry the reader to those descriptions which really compound your overall message.

I really loved these lines:

"hard sandels, and coin medallions

a green dress, and Greek keys"

and

"You have Rubies, Turquiose, and Sapphires,

I just have the moon, and a few pearls"

[WhiteWillow]

You cover so much ground in this piece, but it flows nicely and keeps the reader's attention throughout. Beautifully written

[MAC]

what a great piece...every word line and stanza seem to work alone and yet together. brilliant poem and serious need to check out Gypsy Soul if this isn't your best.

[Adelia Alighieri]

There's a tune to it, I felt like singing it for some reason.
It's like you take bits out of your past and make a little collage out of it and it all looks colorful and connected. Kudos!

[dukovan]

It's no wonder you featured this piece. You have a special kind of ability. Is love to read more of your two's story. Id love to read more about the dynamics of the relationship,