My Blue Confession

An original love poem about the color blue.

Blue used to remind me of sadness and things lost, but since knowing you, blue has become more than just merely a color.   Blue is the sky overhead that smiles down on us when we're together. Blue is the vast, sparkling ocean, which we admire endlessly. Blue is the vivid flowers we pass by on our nature walks. Blue is the blue-jays that rouse us on lazy mornings in our shared bed. Blue is your favorite color. Blue is a feeling.

    Blue is my love for you

Author's Note

This is one of the first poems I've ever written. Any/all feedback is much appreciated!

Reviews

[Glen Weimann]

Another well written and concise work, Cleo. I like it. You ask for improvement suggestions, and I'm struggling! However, here's one for you to consider - you could heighten the sensory pleasures from the ocean and the wild flowers. Admire and pass by are fairly distant detached activities. There's scope for smell, or even interacting with, e.g. paddling or skinny-dipping, or decorating each other's hair with petals, etc etc. This MIGHT heighten the emotional intensity of the piece, thus giving even stronger rationale for the final line of love.

[RannunculusBlooms]

yeah when I came back and reread it I did find that the wording/emotion were a little flat so to speak!!

[Najam Us Saher]

What a nice descriptive write on blue color. I really like this one.

[RannunculusBlooms]

thank you so much!!

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome.

[AustinDF]

It's actually really good. Made me want to puke a little cause I''m not much for sap but damn, this is really good, seriously. I can't help but admire it, and your first poem?? Keep at it.

[RannunculusBlooms]

THANK YOU IM TRYIN

[Tony Jordan]

And the colour associated with the Archangel Michael (if you're that way inclined).
Its hard to really describe colours.
I loved the line "Blue is your favourite colour." - to me, that made this a real love poem.
Those little things like knowing their fav song, fav poem...fav colour are all loving things.