The Neighbors Might Hear

Be quiet, love, or the neighbors might hear

You sobbing into rumpled sheets.

Those tear stained fabrics and ragged clothes

Have folded in your sanity.

 

Be silent, hon, or the neighbors might hear

You crying out when you’re asleep.

Those disturbed pillows and unkempt hair

Have cushioned you from blank defeat.

 

Pipe down, my dear, or the neighbors might hear

The moans that come from troubled minds.

You toss and turn on beds that creak

And lie around the questioning eyes.

 

Hush hush, baby, or the neighbors might hear

The groans that echo empty sighs.

You resonate those haunting calls

And heavily whisper your goodbyes.

Reviews

[Enigma]

Wonderful. Briliantly written and structured. :)

[Helpless]

i agree, fantastic flow as well as style and the concept was divine! :)

[Jacey Poison Girl]

I liked the flow as well and for some reason it did go with the title. At first I thought it was going to be something on the side of raunch but this was good :)

[TJ]

not was I was expecting when I read the title, which may be why this seemed extra tragic to me. how sad.
good flow though, reinforced by the repitition of the phrase!

[Janna Nicole]

You penned this very well. Amazing poem. Wonderful job.

[Chelsea]

omg this is really good. i loved it. this is now my new favorite poem by far! thank you for this wonder write

[Elijah Gleaves]

Lol this wasn't at all what I thought I was going to read when I read the title. I thinking it was going to be something erotic but instead it was something a lot deeper and darker. Behind the smiles and the seemingly loving gestures one never knows how a relationship is really going.. unless your the one in it

[joshua deathdealer]

This is really good. Favorited. "Have folded in your sanity" Very well penned.

[∂αʌ<..]

exquisite....
there is a softness that spreads all over this poem...
comes in my favourite list!

[Kaylor Mason]

I can identify with this one. Well done. I like the rhythm of it, too. It builds a feeling of a rolling wave, and the end of each paragraph is the wave breaking along the shore. A very relaxing, gentle flow.