The Neighbors Might Hear

Be quiet, love, or the neighbors might hear

You sobbing into rumpled sheets.

Those tear stained fabrics and ragged clothes

Have folded in your sanity.

 

Be silent, hon, or the neighbors might hear

You crying out when you’re asleep.

Those disturbed pillows and unkempt hair

Have cushioned you from blank defeat.

 

Pipe down, my dear, or the neighbors might hear

The moans that come from troubled minds.

You toss and turn on beds that creak

And lie around the questioning eyes.

 

Hush hush, baby, or the neighbors might hear

The groans that echo empty sighs.

You resonate those haunting calls

And heavily whisper your goodbyes.

Reviews

[kris reed]

I love this poem, how it repeats from one stanza to the next. You're poem has inspired me to better my own writing. Thanks!

[Short.Nerd]

This was awesome!

[*[_Natasha_]*]

wow. nicely done

[Buddhistboy73]

Great write....this poem works on so many levels, and could mean a different thing to each reader I guess.....it does a good job of conjuring up certain images for me anyways, and that's a good poem for me,...thanks for sharing,.....great final line too......"And heavily whisper your goodbyes"......

[Dan Peacock]

The juxtaposition of the lullaby and the dark content works perfectly...

Libraried ^^

[Matt]

Great imagery, really draws you into the poem!

[Jasmine]

I love all the ways you coulb go with the meaning.

[Angela H.]

Great title and imagery. Has the feel of a dark lullabye.

[Frank D]

I like this one a lot. It has a classic air about it, but it's also timeless at the same time. It sort of has an Edgar Allen Poe meets Emily Dickinson feel to it.

[Dinesh Sairam]

Very appealing! Combining the classic feet with modern imagery is sure the way to go. Though there is a certain amount of cliche factor, I don't think it takes out the interest all together. And I would think, in a 'xaxa' rhyme scheme, straight rhymes would do better than slant rhymes.

PS. I sure library-ed this.

Keep writing.