Hot Water

What would it feel like if hot rain fell from the sky?

Burning and scorching all the passersby

We’ll wonder if God’s angry and had to cry

Those bittersweet tears that were wholly divine

 

What are those bright stars that fall from your eyes?

They land on my shoulder and stain your goodbyes

Save and collect them until the right time

Return them to the heart that used to be mine

Reviews

[Sukriti Suki]

This is very well written. In short you described many emotions. I like this a lot.

[Sothe (White Princess)]

Wow, that was very inspirational! I loved the emotion put into the piece and everything that came along with it. There is so much depth and I loved reading it. Imagery and rhyming was a nice touch. Well done.

[L. Catherine]

Very sweet with a tinge of sadness at the end, nicely written

[SensuelDeMot]

Oh this is beautiful, what wonderful imagery and use of imagination. I especially love the last stanza...brilliant use of word imagery and emotion. :)

[Angela H.]

I tend not to like rhyming poetry, but I like this. Nice work.

[Frank D]

This one is very meaningful for the times.
I really like the emotional imagery you portray in your poetry.

[Krystal Nicole]

Great poem. I love the feeling and the words flow well. Great job!!

[-Scribe in Style-]

A cold trickle..
Or a warm wax candle.

Well written. I enjoyed reading. The ideas in the poem raise many different issues. A real thinking trigger...

[Coyote Poetry]

Some good questions in your poem. If God ain't pissed off yet. He must be blind or sleeping? We need to hold on to the stars and keep hope alive when we are sad. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Dragon]

Whoa. This peom gives me the shivers. I love all the expression you show to this. Great work. Oh, I also love the details. :)