Initiation

Initiation

A Poem by clairvoyantmars

Young fledglings linger

Curiosity strikes a jolt

What test is there to find one’s self

In the depth of this darkened room?

 

Why must we reflect?

What is there left to ponder?

Snatched at birth, stolen self worth

Past this unlit gloom

 

No thought of us escaping

We know no other life

Trained to kill, unknowing still

Heed no other vice

 

Control your feelings, Master said

Pay the heart no regard

The power stands in the palm of your hand

Numb yourself and suffice

 

No glimmer of hope stands

We stop for no man

We find ourselves in darkness

Our thoughts are in unison

 

No hope…

© 2011 clairvoyantmars


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Very...dark and somewhat disturbing. You have one piece about keeping hope and now you saw NO HOPE.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Dark and touching. I can see a shadow smirking ..great piece

Posted 13 Years Ago


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A very vivid and descriptive write about hope and loss. I can feel the emotions and strength flowing from this poem and the way you faded everything away.
"The power stands in the palm of your hand
Numb yourself and suffice"
A poignant and beautiful write :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


very smooth and poignant

Posted 13 Years Ago


Beautiful write and I see more in these words than what is obvious. Very powerful and moving piece.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I agree with HopelesslyDevoted. xD
Truly Amazing.

Posted 13 Years Ago


When there is no hope, there is no life. Period. Its the end but the way you wrote this brings in a feeling of much more than that, like an empty hole waiting to be filled.

Posted 13 Years Ago


No hope....
wow.... how many times do we end our days feeling this way.
wonderful poem, really! amazing wording!

Posted 13 Years Ago


I like the imagery in this poem. Great write.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I get such a sad feeling while reading this. Its very awell written poem.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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clairvoyantmars

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I've been seriously starting to write my own novels since 2008. So far, I've finished three novels and have a lot of unfinished ones piled up. I also write short stories and poems and the occasional s.. more..

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