Initiation

Young fledglings linger

Curiosity strikes a jolt

What test is there to find one’s self

In the depth of this darkened room?

 

Why must we reflect?

What is there left to ponder?

Snatched at birth, stolen self worth

Past this unlit gloom

 

No thought of us escaping

We know no other life

Trained to kill, unknowing still

Heed no other vice

 

Control your feelings, Master said

Pay the heart no regard

The power stands in the palm of your hand

Numb yourself and suffice

 

No glimmer of hope stands

We stop for no man

We find ourselves in darkness

Our thoughts are in unison

 

No hope…

Reviews

[Clay Feet]

You show the mindset of murderers from their point of view; having been taught to keep emotions out of their existence. I wonder if true sociopaths ever experience a jolt of curiosity? Well, you do it for them or we would not know how their Master has indoctrinated them. Are we to show pity because of their lack of self-worth?

They may have no hope, but I do. I hope they get caught before they kill again for no reason that I read in your writing.

Excellent writing displaying a stark view into a societal sickness.

[Dean Steven Nichols]

Writing that defines a writer how knows how to create a beautiful piece.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Dark and morbid, a truly excellent piece, well done good read

[Babieegirl]

wow. I liked this one a lot.. i felt a lot of feelings in it, dark feelings... it was good i liked it.. actually i read it outloud to get a better understanding of it. Great.

[lostboy]

without heart where is hope or light?

[LetMeLaughLetMeSing]

Wow. Even the way the words are strung across the page is reminiscent of being trapped. This is fantastic.

[Elijah Gleaves]

This poem has some great diction. The excellent word choice creates a atmosphere void of hope... nice work

[Muse]

Why are all good writers such manic depressives? Lol, seriously, I could not have done it better myself.

[light and ashes]

Wow, amazing piece. Love it!

[quinfinn]

provocative and compelling write, massive in emotion and revealing of the darker side of human nature, wow!