Angels

Two poems about angels I wrote a long time ago.

 

I’m a fallen angel

Cast to earth to pay for my crime

They tore my golden wings off

And I’m running out of time

It seems no one can help me

Grant me this one last wish

This final act of kindness

‘Cause soon I am to perish

 

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I’ll give you this golden feather

The only memory of my heavenly past

Till one day I fell in love

And fell into sin of lust

Now my golden wings are gone

And this feather is the last of my treasures

And a constant reminder

Of why I was punished

And a love, that in the end,

Wasn’t worth anything

Reviews

[Emily B]

love builds and grows, I believe that

[Hello, Goodbye]

curiously interesting, the concept is appealing

[lostboy]

true love will make ripples in the universe... false love only destroys..

[Dori]

A lovely display of ink here! Congradulations on your Top Writer's Badge! You must feel very honored!

[Kenneth The Poet]

This reminds of an angel falling from heaven after being on Satan's side in the Great Rebellion. I see that in the last few lines of the poem.

[Helpless]

incredible! this is one of your first works that i have read and I am blown away by its beauty and passion! brava!

[-Scribe in Style-]

I really enjoyed this poem!
I am not sure of your perspective, but for me these words are a whole new level. A cross between heaven and earth and why we are really here. Where is our belonging. I like the similarities and contrasts betweens the two stanzas. The whole piece works really well!
Love it! Well written!
:)

[clairvoyantmars]

such yearning, such heartbreak. i tried to reveal it all here. i hope this/these poems have touched your lives. maybe you'll experience this or make someone else experience this because of you.

[myst-ry]

both of these can be read independently with different structure and rhyming.. yet seem like a continuum and complete poem in content with an artistic structure as well..
a nice piece of writing.