She Screams

About a lost girl who's made many mistakes

She looks at her reflection
She can only see the rejection
Of all that have broken
Her heart.

She Screams in the night
She has given up the fight
And now she has
Fallen apart.

She is a slowly dying flame
She will never the the same
And she can never,
Ever restart.

For this girl does not cry
Only can she sigh
Because it was she who was
Not smart.

And now I hope you see,
After thinking thoroughly
That this girl is not you
But me.

Author's Note

Thanks a lot for all those who haven't been very kind to me in this past year. And that's many, many people. You know who you are.

Reviews

[freelancejouster]

great twists of words, clever.

[alexlessah]

I love this poem, it is very touching.

[Violeta]

Oh my... I especially love the first two stanzas, because I feel like I can relate... It's such an awful feeling when you feel everyone's rejection weighing you down, you feel like Atlas.

[~M&A~]

Sad. But wonderful. I love the colorful picture, and i love the picture you paint with your words. Great write, Claire. ^^ Bravo.

[Dreamer]

nice piece:) Im not very sure abt the ending because it doesnt really seem to tie in with the rest of the poem (thats just me though). Keep writing. Will read more:)

[Jocelin]

just like "crimson goddess'" review I can relate to to this.. A LOT!
good poem keep writing!

[Crimson Goddess]

i feel like this on a daily basis i really can relate to this i like it alot. i know exactly where you are coming from. :)

[Gleek4ever21]

I love it! The last words are my favorite!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

The emotion in the words grab the throat of the reader and dont let go until the final word. Well done, a well written piece.

[Christina May Shanaberg]

Outstandingly written for such a young poet. This piece is something that we have, probably, all felt at some point in time and you express it so well. I hope that you plan on being a vet and a poet. Keep writing!