untamed expression

inspirational short poem

i feel like my heart is shackled to stone

       all i can do is hear the clinging of steel chains

           an unknown gravity pressures my insanity,

             it hard for me to breathe, i just cant break away 

                from this untamed expression inside of me,

my eyes feel like dead weight

     i just feel so tired ,just coping with this feeling

        trying to stay strong,but i just dont know what to do,

         im sittin here just listening to these chains,a deep steady heartbeat

            do you here that,it just created its own tune, 

written by: CRYSTAL L KLOSSKI      date:1/14/2015

Reviews

[Roshan Nair]

You have kept the work brief, I like the summing up of all the thoughts you have with such limited words. It seems like a very human poem, effortlessly human, not trying to get more into winding representations than what is truly being experienced.
Great work!

[Coyote Poetry]

You said a lot in the short poem.
"my eyes feel like dead weight
i just feel so tired ,just coping with this feeling
trying to stay strong,but i just dont know what to do,"
I like the flow of thoughts leading to the strong ending. Questions and decision can leave us in deep thoughts and bad places. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[El Chico]

Honesty is ripe in this poem. Thanks for sharing it with the audience

[Sami Khalil]

Passionate expression with a steady heartbeat. Bravo....................

[One Lost Anti-Hero]

Thats alot of passion in this poem and sounds very in tune with the writer.

[Stephen]

I really like poem. I don't know for sure, but I have nights when I am weighed down by feelings and emotions to the point that I just want to cry. But that is just me, and others were honest, they do the same. Thanks for sharing

[crystal klosski]

thank u for reading n giving me imput on my writing,,its not the best ,,but its a workin progress,,,lol

[Stephen]

Mine is not the best either, so we are in the same boat. But I really did enjoy it and it was good, you have talent

[crystal klosski]

thankz,,,i appreciate that