I know just how this situation is. How demanding and dangerous a single cigarette can be. One can get hooked so easily, yet they won't even care because every drag brings them more and more peace. Brings them down more, relaxing them, engulfing them with swirling, dancing smoke. I also loved your imagery here! Beautiful!
I could have related to this 2 years back.. Smoking does seem an easy escape to drown yourself in your times of distress.. Though now I feel different, still I love the smell of smoke lol 😛
You have written this down nicely!
Damn!
And that's what makes u freaking HOT - the bee of thoughts. U played very well with the enchantment of candescent words. Smoke kills people, bt it's ashes be what keeping u alive even if u envy the feelings of shattered heart. Brilliant. Loved reading ur poetry.
This is my thought process every time. I can picture this so easily with such little detail and it was an intelligent choice to make this vague, it makes it easier to relate to. Are you planning on expanding upon this or letting it stay as it is?
Wow. I have to confess this made me laugh (in a bit of a cynical, sarcastic way). But it still does have that melancholy edge to it. I do enjoy a bit of snarkiness in poetry and literature, although it does make me sad to really feel that someone wants to end their life (which I can also relate to).
Nonetheless, it's still a well-written story, and just long enough to be effective. Nice job!
I like this short story. Sometimes the long death is more scary than the short one. You did a outstanding job with the story using minimum words. Thank you for sharing the excellent story.
Coyote
I know just how this situation is. How demanding and dangerous a single cigarette can be. One can get hooked so easily, yet they won't even care because every drag brings them more and more peace. Brings them down more, relaxing them, engulfing them with swirling, dancing smoke. I also loved your imagery here! Beautiful!
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