Take the Time

Take the Time

A Poem by GypsyMoonCat
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Since moving back to my much-missed small country town of 12 years, I am enjoying a hiatus from work due to not having a job yet. So I'm a lady of leisure for now and Taking the Time ...

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Take the time to breathe salty air, 

sticky sweet with sweat

Wipe droplets from your forehead

and flick them to the ethers

Watch them settle like sleeping fireflies

on wafts of sea spray


Take the time to see all that lies before you

mountains like swollen bellies, lying supine

lapping up rays from a benevolent sun,

while clouds like stealthy smokers

cast shadow over green


Take the time to feel warmth, serenity

Soft blankets of breezes wrapping around you,

like mother’s lullaby -

her words resting upon your heart

in devoted supplication


Take the time to hear trees talking to each other

Silent sentinels to the untrained ear,

but that rustling is laden with knowledge and history;

if only one knew how to tap the armour

of an ironbark soldier


Take the time today

because tomorrow never comes

© 2017 GypsyMoonCat


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k
This is a really lovely poem. There is some beautiful imagery in here and it has a very pleasant tone throughout. One suggestion is that you think about punctuation and where you're missing it in this piece. There are a lot of moments that run together and get muddled that could really use a period or comma to create much needed separation. Other than that though, really nice work!

Posted 7 Years Ago


GypsyMoonCat

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much k, I have taken your suggestions on board and amended accordingly. After reading it a.. read more
A very succinct poem. You have used some lovely word pictures to take us with you, breathing, seeing, feeling, hearing all that is around. Yes indeed, 'Take the time today, because tomorrow never comes.' I loved this poem.

Posted 7 Years Ago


GypsyMoonCat

7 Years Ago

Thanks Great Aunt Astri, I really appreciate your kind comments :)

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GypsyMoonCat
GypsyMoonCat

South Durras, NSW, Australia



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I write mainly poems, but sometimes do the odd short story or flash fiction. I love poetry, although I'm not keen on the modern three line style, so you won't see many, if not ANY, of those! Been writ.. more..

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