The Painful Truth

It doesn't pay to avoid the truth

The painful truth unbidden has found its way to me

and secrets I’d kept hidden laid bare for all to see

In ignorance reflected I’d seen what loomed ahead

but never could accept it - rejecting it instead

 

You waged your war alone, unseen by sleeping eyes

your final hand long thrown before I realised

I’m screaming now because I kept ignoring you

How very wrong I was, for all along, you knew

 

Now nothing brings relief from pain so coldly stark

Through wretchedness and grief I watch your eyes grow dark ...

... and hear the angel-song - an echo in the hollow:

 

It tells me you have gone and I am not to follow

Reviews

[G.C.... aka Gene]

enjoyed your poem.

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[Robert Haigh]

Truth will out, as they say - and it usually does in the end. Sometimes we can be the victims of our own unwillingness to face a difficult truth. A well-penned piece.

[GypsyMoonCat]

Thanks Robert :)

[Aarea]

I like this poem. The ending is dramatic and your word choice is subtle and brings imagery. Be careful about rhyming. Rhyming is great if it doesn't stop you from using the words you want. I think your rhyming worked well here but there were a few sentences that seemed like you might have changed them to fit a rhyme pattern. Overall this is good work. :)

[GypsyMoonCat]

It's heartening that you noticed the rhyming "overkill" in this lol! I'd written it using internal rhyme as well as ending rhyme. It does come across a bit forced here and there.

I appreciate your review, and that it was a thoughtful one. In truth, I don't like internal rhyme as well as ending rhyme - it does come across stiff and loses its flow to a degree, so I don't write this style much anymore :)

[Shabeeh Haider]

Beautifully expressed. Lovely yet very sad. Lovely use of rhymes.
We hope our loved ones will always stay with us but the reality is so different and so sad.
Death always has the final say.

[GypsyMoonCat]

Thanks Shabeeh, I'm glad you enjoyed this! Cheers :)

[Gee]

We sometimes ignore, or try to, that which we find difficult to cope with, only to regret those decisions made at a later date. Very well written and flowed beautifully.

[GypsyMoonCat]

Again, thank you so much Gee. Would you believe this poem was first written about a rabbit I owned for about six months years ago. I worked so hard to keep him alive, but all was lost. So here is the final rework of this poem. Funny how things start isn't it?

[BBP]

Loved this one! Dark and poetic and short and sweet.

You executed this perfectly.

[GypsyMoonCat]

Thanks Bev! Glad you enjoyed this, and thank you for your friend request, which has been gratefully accepted :)

[wordman]

a beautiful,touching sad write

[GypsyMoonCat]

Thank you wordman xo

[Miss Sharon]

Wow. This one grips me to the core....for I can relate to this pain. Wonderfully descriptive and a memorable read my friend. ~Sharon

[GypsyMoonCat]

Thanks Miss Sharon. It's a privilege indeed to receive such high praise from someone whose work has given me new hope for poetry lol!