Converse

Life is like a pair of Converse. It might be beautiful or perfect for a while. But it always gets dusty If you dont bring out The best in it. Sometimes the ties that Hold you and your friends  Together Might come apart After alot of wear And tear. But you can always create new And stronger ties. Lace them tightly all around Your loved ones. And keep them close. Always jump at the chance To step on new surfaces. Because you never know when The fabric of your life Could come apart And everyone you touched Is left with mere memories

Reviews

[Daniel Beckwith]

It's cool. I liked 'But you can always create new And stronger ties' made me think of tying a shoe lace made of people. I liked 'The fabric of your life Could come apart' clever.

I don't like capitals at the start of each line, feels quite old fashioned. I think you should either have no punctuation at all, or a lot more. plus a full stop at the end.

Being picky again. Good luck!