in my dreams

In my dreams i see you,

in my dreams i fell you,

but there's something about you

i can't get you out my mind.

when i open my eyes i see you,

i fell you, i want to meet you,

but i fell like that is not true.

Reviews

[Jake Xingu]

This is amazing. I like the spelling and grammar mistakes, I sincerely feel like it adds to the piece! Whether or not they were intentional, bravo. Poetry is truly great when it is from the heart.

[Trigorin]

Check your spelling and grammar. Nice piece, and the brevity of it really works for you, I think. Your word choice is, however, a little uninspired, and I feel like there's so much more metaphorical and beautiful language you could have used in this piece, especially considering the medium of poetry. A good start, but it needs a little work.

[Black Rose]

That was really beautiful.Good job.