the questions

                              The Questions
 

  Am I selfish when I say, 'that's mine'.?
  Am I arrogant when I can do things at my very best?
  Am I cruel when I  do not go to church on sundays?
  AM I materialistic when I wish for electronic gadgets?
  Am I disobedient when I don't want to do it?
  Am I disrespectful when I say that your perspective is wrong?
  Am I dependent when I need your help every time?
  Am I irresponsible when I prioritize my own personal needs?
 

                               OR.....


  I am a human being
  imperfect in all my life
  not recognizing right from wrong


                              BUT STILL...


  I can conquer all my dreams


                              AND...


  without knowing the LORD,
  I cannot found the answers
  or solutions that I need and seek
 
  Forever, I will, my LORD,
  praise you with all my heart.
 

Author's Note

what are your questions in this life?

Reviews

[CecilA]

Chuna,

Am I selfish when I say, 'That's mine.' ?

Am I arrogant when I do my very best? (I am not clear on what you are implying here.) Or - Am I arrogant when I can do things at my very best.

Am I disrespectful when I say that your perspective is wrong?

I am just a human being,
imperfect in all my life,
not recognizing right from wrong.

On my own,
I cannot find the answers
or solutions that I need and seek.

Forever I will, my Lord,
praise you with all my heart.

These are some areas which I would change for clarity. But you need to use the words which convey your meaning.

I hope you find these suggestions helpful. Thank you for asking my opinion.

Sincerely,

Cecil

[chuna]

Cecil,

thank you so much and I appreciate you suggestions!
sorry because I cannot say that "I am just a human being"
for me it's being dishonor to GOD,,
I just learn that from our values teacher,,
hope you understand,,:D

Chuna,

[CecilA]

Chuna,

No dishonor intended by the word 'just'. What I meant was that 'I am only human' which denotes an inferiority to God. In our language, we sometimes make that statement to acknowledge that we are God's creation and not on His level; acknowledging our position in comparison to Him.

You don't have to apologize for stating your intentions. I only meant to help not put words into your mouth.

I look forward to reading more of your interesting writing.

Cecil

[chuna]

Cecil,

I respect your opinion,,


I'm sorry!


Chuna,

[CecilA]

Chuna,

I enjoyed your honesty and openess expressed in your poem. Except for a couple of grammer fixes, I find it well done.

You have a gift for being able to draw your audience in with your opening question: "Am I selfish when I say 'That's mine.' ?" My immediate answer is: 'No.' Unless it's something that isn't yours or something which should be shared; it's yours.

I like your ending. Your refer to God as your source. How wise and mature. He can help you with finding the answer to those questions.

Thank you for sharing this fascinating poem with us,

CecilA

[chuna]

thank you for reviewing my poem!
i'm glad you like it!
and thank for saying that i am MATURE!
they don't say that to me,,
thank you very much!

[chuna]

by the way ,, what grammar errors you had noticed?
I just want to know for some corrections,.
thank you!