Mayday

Don't get me wrong.

It’s there

In the middle of nowhere

No north, no south

Even the stars refused to guide

The night is black and unfriendly

The wind whispers solitude

And the ocean seems like graveyard

Waiting for its tenant

Yes, the sea is vast

But there ain’t a single path to take

Slowly, and slowly

It shrinks

The biting cold,

It’s making it numb

But why still feel pain?

Slowly

It shrinks deeper

It’s peach black, darker than before

And it’s suffocating

But it’s too tired to struggle

At last, the last hit of pain

And then it’ll all be gone

As it shrinks deeper,

It widens its eyes

It wants to see

How the world looks like

The world that is never fair

Yes, it will remember

Laying beneath the forgotten darkness

It will always remember.

 

 

 

Author's Note

I'm not the kind of person who goes around telling people how unfortunate I am. But I do want them to know they're fortunate for having things that I will never have.

Reviews

[Dhaye]

Yes, we have our own gifts. Maybe we are unfortunate in some aspects, but still we have something to be grateful of. I will not argue if you feel unfortunate today, but I'll pray that your heart's desires would be yours at the right time so that like others, your night would turn into day.

[SimpleMind]

That's so uplifting, thanks :)
I have things I am grateful for, and I couldn't ask for more. But still...

[Ahmad Cox]

I really appreciate the honesty and the power in this poem. I could literally feel the deep emotions and intent in this poem. Good job. :)

[SimpleMind]

Thanks so much :) I'm glad to know I'm making sense in this piece :)

[khalid]

nobody can decide who have what is better than whom..people share both blessings and sufferings. what would a disabled person say then? you have much more than many others. writing this means you really do.

[SimpleMind]

"you have much more than many others"

Gotta quote this one :)
In a way, you're right.

[khalid]

be optimistic, try to feel satisfaction with whatever you have..

[SimpleMind]

I am optimistic in my own way ;)

But thanks, i'll keep that in mind :)

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from the structure to the words picking and images, from all aspects, this is really wonderful poem..

[SimpleMind]

Thanks for appreciating the structure and all :) ... seriously, I'm thankful

[Sami Khalil]

The world that is never fair
Yes, it will remember
Laying beneath the forgotten darkness.
A very nice write...:)

[SimpleMind]

Thanks Khal :) I'm glad you like it

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. Any time...:)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

This is raw and dark, I like your writing style. keep writing!

[SimpleMind]

Thanks for the kind words :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Welcome :)