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Freeze in place,

Face in peace

With silver-lined smiles

Of chipped teacup teeth

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Bite my hand,

I don't mind if I bleed

We all bleed

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We all bleed

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Drip, melt your trust in my hands

Freeze my skin

Buying goosebumps by the can

Ring it up

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Ring it up

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Ring it up

Ring it up

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Drip for me

Freeze for me

Melt into place

Peaceful porcelain face

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White eyes

Red teeth

Blue clementine tongue

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Child lost to freedom won

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Drip for me

Freeze for me

Drip for me

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Ring it up.

Author's Note

Ignore basic grammatical errors, as there are some rules that, as a writer, I don't care to abide by. I feel restricted when following these rules, and since I have such a hard time getting my thoughts across, I'd rather break a few rules than be grammatically "perfect."

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a good thing about poetry is having poetic license...punctuation is often a crap shoot in poetry...
I hardly use any at all...but on purpose so readers can read lines as they will...putting the emphasis on whatever words they see fit.
I really like this poem...especially the idea of "melt your trust in my hands" and "child lost to freedom won"
growing up is hard...but we learn from our mistakes, from the good and bad that happens...we cannot just purchase experience...we have to live it...we have to preserve it somehow in burn preventative freezer bags of acceptance, and just let life happen and teach us.
nicely done.
j.

[chrysantheranium]

I feel the same way, J! Why put your heart and soul into a piece if excessive punctuation keeps the reader from reading it with their own heart and soul? I like to see what others take from what I have to give, and that, I believe, is the best thing about poetry. Thank you for your kind review! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

[Neville]

Had to read these words several times, but each time I did... I began to see things more clearer and cleanly

ker ching


Neville