Angels Among You

A poem I wanted too write this poem and it describes how i see those around me and why I care about people and this poem is Based around the fact that Alot of people call me The Guardian Angel.

You walk threw this life blinded by your fears
No one knows the pain that burns in you
But child I know you
I feel you sense you
I see you
Wondering threw the shadow of Life
Your world gets darker and darker
Your feet grow heavier and heavier
You scream I hear you
You scream I sense you
You scream I see you
You scream I know you
Child close your eyes and prey too the skies
May you know no more lies
As you prey too the skies
This light shines down upon you
I have found you
 No more reason too Fear
No more reason too scream
close your eyes and prey too the sky's
Because Angels are among you and now
We Know You
 

Reviews

[Dark0592]

dude this is awesome.
aside from the grammar and typos it's perfect

[Lily Mae]

There are definitely Earth Angels among us doing kind and wonderful things to help those in need and this poem expresses that well..xo

[Chris]

Thank you for reviewing my poem i would be very grateful if you reviewed my What Have We Become poem.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

I liked this, but there are a couple typos.. I'm not doing this to be rude, just to help you be the best you can be..

As you prey too the skies
This light shines down upon you
I have found you
No more reason too Fear
No more reason too scream
close your eyes and prey too the sky's

That part, should be:

As you prey to the skies
This light shines down upon you
I have found you
No more reason to Fear
No more reason to scream
close your eyes and prey to the skies

Too means also, to is what I believe you meant to put. And the plural of sky is skies, not sky's.


Wondering threw the shadow of Life

I believe that wondering is supposed to wandering, maybe I'm wrong, I don't know. Also, threw should be through. You also made this mistake in the first line of the poem.


Sorry for all the criticism, yet again, I just want your poem to be as wonderful as it possibly can(: this is really beautiful and has a great message to it, I believe that if you had read through it once more to check for errors, your poem would've been perfect on its own. Anyways, great job, I hope I've helped you and didn't offend :/

[Chris]

You did not offend me thank you for reviewing my poem i am sorry for the typos have a nice thanksgiving.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

You don't need to apologize, I'm just trying to help(: I hope you have an amazing thanksgiving as well.

[Beautiful_Nightmere]

I think it's good but i think that the "Child" thing is repeated too much....But otherwise i think you did good! :)

[Chris]

Thank you for your input i have edited this peace based upon your review and i find your input very useful i look forward to more input from you in the near future again thank you .

[Chris]

I ment piece not peace lol

[Beautiful_Nightmere]

That is much better! :) I like it A LOT more like that(: Good job with the revision! :)