New Mexico Skies

Trying not to let the sun set for good.

 

New Mexico Skies

 

As the sun sets over New Mexico

So goes my heart into its night skies

Her mind is even farther gone than her body

That was set adrift on a hotel bed of lies

 

Thorns cover her heart now

To keep a so called "player" out

Yet his heart beats stronger for her than any other

Longing for her love like a Chihuahuan Desert drought

 

And it's dying

Parched from the lack of her affection

Lost wandering hot sands of time

Praying that she will finally give him some direction

 

So,

Let the rains come

Showering over his emotional pores

Letting his soul bloom

Into the skies where the Prairie Falcon soars.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Ashley Griffiths]

Great imagery throughout the piece.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you, Ashley :)

[Crystal Ellyson]

Love it. It is wonderful and it makes me want to go to New Mexico. It is great.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you, Crystal :)

[Pryde Foltz]

So,
Let the rains come
Showering over his emotional pores
Letting his soul bloom
Into the skies where the Prairie Falcon soars.

A deeply symbolic and personal write. You have a lot of talent. My experience is that the prairie falcon flies above your head, telling you the answer lies within and not in the arms of another. But I do go one. Beautiful write.

[Chris Micha]

Wow...thank you so much, Pryde.

[Sami Khalil]

"Let the rains come
Showering over his emotional pores
Letting his soul bloom"

Don't worry my friend. Your sun will not set in your readers hearts. Bravo again...:)..................

[Chris Micha]

Thank you my most wonderful friend :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly...:)....................

[NoelHC]

Another good poem, with longing and pain apparent. You have a real talent with words.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you my good friend, as do you!!!

[John Ryan]

i love the line "Her mind is even farther gone than her body
That was set adrift on a hotel bed of lies"

very well done with the diction and wording

[Chris Micha]

Thank you, sir. That was a tricky line to pull off, so I'm glad you appreciated it!

[Honey-Bee]

Wonderful! As the sunsets over New Mexico, so goes my heart over the night skies. I can feel your heart sinking with this sunset. Lovely!

[Chris Micha]

And in truth it does set, hopefully not for good. Thank you, Honey-Bee :)

[sona]

Simply wow , Thank you so much for sharing it with us . Its really beautiful and holds lot of emotions . If thats how mexico skies feels like then Its definitely in my to-visit list .

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much, Sona :)

[sona]

My pleasure ...Your works are simply great

[h d e rushin]

Now here's another state I have to visit, while I had grown so comfortable in my little room
of square tiles, Roget thesaurus' and marginal internet connections...lol/
Supremely powerful and good image making my friend.

dana

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much, Dana :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very much intensity creeps into this piece, like thorn covering the pores of a rose that wants to love back, but finds a drought of feelings.

nicely done.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much my good dear friend :)