Transit of Venus

Transit of Venus

A Poem by Chris Micha
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This is probably silly but I had an idea of chaos within our solar system. The close relationship between the Sun & Venus and the protection of their baby (Earth). It can be taken a few ways.

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Transit of Venus

On the other side
As the war split the world in two
I let go of your hand and said "Goodbye" to you

I saw your heart
Drifting into the battlefields
Leaving scars that would never heal

From the underside 
My heart ripped my chest in two
Leaping out to come after you

Not far behind
The moon and neighboring stars aligned
Joining forces to be by our side

Just on the edge
Of the gap in-between the world
The moon and stars gave my heart a hurl

It landed hard
In the warring side of the Earth
Drawing swords it began the search

Now guided by
The stars brilliant internal light
Your heart began to shine so bright

With swords in hand
It charged through the dark forces
And with our hearts it stabbed the sorceress

From the dark
I saw you coming back to me
And the stars returning to the galaxy

So from here on out
We will stay closer than we've ever been
Inside me you will hide if it ever happens again

Now,
We'll watch from afar
As she's born into the light
Her blue eyes will pierce the night.

© 2014 Chris Micha


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I really like where you took this one, Batman. I would never have thought of anything like this and the way you've written it and presented it is remarkable. You really are a very talented writer.

The story you tell in this poem really hits the reader and you do get your point across. It is something that I could read every single day and never get bored... Honestly amazing!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Micha

10 Years Ago

Awe Sye, you are so sweet my dear to say that. I am so glad to have your support and you've been a g.. read more
s y e

10 Years Ago

You've been a great friend to me too! :)



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I like the theme of celestial forms and get the metaphor of venus equating love, seemingly that ended horribly, but then was rekindled. But I think the sorceress bit was confusing for me. Is it that a third party perhaps caused a split so is personified as an evildoer? Something new and beautiful seems to be birthed in the cycle of the cosmos. It's definitely different and interesting :) Penny

Posted 10 Years Ago


Chris Micha

10 Years Ago

I had a had time with it too, but I couldn't come up with really anything else to express an evil in.. read more
just Penny

10 Years Ago

Oh I see it now lol. thanks.
universes collide, worlds collide and in time hearts collide then get separated because of the wars...but eventually return to each other, either literally or metaphysically in some kind of peaceful universe away from all the strife...

beautiful words, here...Christian.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Micha

10 Years Ago

I am so glad you got it, Jacob. I knew if anyone would you would. I am honored, sir!
This is such a beautiful idea! How did you ever think of it? It's something really special and different. It made me kind of sad with the goodbye and the scars that wouldn't heal, and the heart ripping out to go after was so sweet and tragic.. and then I was happy at the end when it was alright and beautiful.. Well done :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Micha

10 Years Ago

Thank you my dear sweet friend. I am glad you understood where it was truly going and that means a l.. read more
Glass Heart Inc

10 Years Ago

Always a pleasure :)
This is another lovely piece.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Chris Micha

10 Years Ago

Thank you my dear. I'm glad to hear that :)
I really like where you took this one, Batman. I would never have thought of anything like this and the way you've written it and presented it is remarkable. You really are a very talented writer.

The story you tell in this poem really hits the reader and you do get your point across. It is something that I could read every single day and never get bored... Honestly amazing!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Micha

10 Years Ago

Awe Sye, you are so sweet my dear to say that. I am so glad to have your support and you've been a g.. read more
s y e

10 Years Ago

You've been a great friend to me too! :)
I like the poem and the way you have the poem set up. Keep it up!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Chris Micha

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Emily! :)
Such A Beautiful Poem. You Are Truly Talented. Your Poetry is Wonderful.
I Enjoy Reading Your Work Very Much. This is just another great work of yours!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Chris Micha

10 Years Ago

Michele, you're so sweet and I that you so much! :)
michele vera

10 Years Ago

You are very welcome Christian. Every Poem I read of yours is truly inspiring! You have tremendous T.. read more
A stellar poem... a sweet story of courage and love. Nice! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Chris Micha

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Quill. I appreciate it!
This is good (as usual). You have the power to evoke the appropriate mood and It just always flows, never jumbled or always switching. Great Job

Posted 10 Years Ago


Chris Micha

10 Years Ago

Thanks, Renee. I hope it all made sense. Thank you for your support doll! :)
It is great. I love it. It is very creative. Great job!!!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Chris Micha

10 Years Ago

Awe thank you so much, Crystal. :)

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Chris Micha

Richland, MS



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