Transit of Venus

This is probably silly but I had an idea of chaos within our solar system. The close relationship between the Sun & Venus and the protection of their baby (Earth). It can be taken a few ways.

Transit of Venus

On the other side

As the war split the world in two

I let go of your hand and said "Goodbye" to you

I saw your heart

Drifting into the battlefields

Leaving scars that would never heal

From the underside 

My heart ripped my chest in two

Leaping out to come after you

Not far behind

The moon and neighboring stars aligned

Joining forces to be by our side

Just on the edge

Of the gap in-between the world

The moon and stars gave my heart a hurl

It landed hard

In the warring side of the Earth

Drawing swords it began the search

Now guided by

The stars brilliant internal light

Your heart began to shine so bright

With swords in hand

It charged through the dark forces

And with our hearts it stabbed the sorceress

From the dark

I saw you coming back to me

And the stars returning to the galaxy

So from here on out

We will stay closer than we've ever been

Inside me you will hide if it ever happens again

Now,

We'll watch from afar

As she's born into the light

Her blue eyes will pierce the night.

Reviews

[s y e]

I really like where you took this one, Batman. I would never have thought of anything like this and the way you've written it and presented it is remarkable. You really are a very talented writer.

The story you tell in this poem really hits the reader and you do get your point across. It is something that I could read every single day and never get bored... Honestly amazing!!

[Chris Micha]

Awe Sye, you are so sweet my dear to say that. I am so glad to have your support and you've been a great friend my dear! :)

[s y e]

You've been a great friend to me too! :)

[AshlynnA]

Such a good write,i was on the adventure the entire time.

[Chris Micha]

I'm so glad, Ashlynn. That's all I wanted to do :)

[Mirra]

This is totally a WOW!! The flow, the tone, the mood, the imagery, the creativity - everything, excellent work of art!! You always give me a new favorite ^_^ Thanks for sharing this one.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you my dear. You are such a great supporter! :)

[Mirra]

You are always welcome :-)

[willweb]

Exceptional poem. Took the reader on a voyage. Very good.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so very much! :)

[FireFox9]

Great job on this one. Getting better with each poem my friend. Fox-

[Chris Micha]

Wow man I really appreciate that. It truly means a lot! :)

[Purbleazaleya]

This was really beautifully conceived and written. Really nice imagery for the reader, especially with all the metaphors involved.

[Chris Micha]

Well thank you and it was quite a few. I really appreciate it!

[Madalyn Beck]

You have quite the imagination! I really enjoyed this. It is definitely a very clever write! You are talented, my friend! Here is my favorite verse.

"From the dark
I saw you coming back to me
And the stars returning to the galaxy"

That really gets to me. Fantastic! xo (:

[Chris Micha]

Thank you my dear. Coming from an amazing writer as yourself means a lot. :)