Transit of Venus

This is probably silly but I had an idea of chaos within our solar system. The close relationship between the Sun & Venus and the protection of their baby (Earth). It can be taken a few ways.

Transit of Venus

On the other side

As the war split the world in two

I let go of your hand and said "Goodbye" to you

I saw your heart

Drifting into the battlefields

Leaving scars that would never heal

From the underside 

My heart ripped my chest in two

Leaping out to come after you

Not far behind

The moon and neighboring stars aligned

Joining forces to be by our side

Just on the edge

Of the gap in-between the world

The moon and stars gave my heart a hurl

It landed hard

In the warring side of the Earth

Drawing swords it began the search

Now guided by

The stars brilliant internal light

Your heart began to shine so bright

With swords in hand

It charged through the dark forces

And with our hearts it stabbed the sorceress

From the dark

I saw you coming back to me

And the stars returning to the galaxy

So from here on out

We will stay closer than we've ever been

Inside me you will hide if it ever happens again

Now,

We'll watch from afar

As she's born into the light

Her blue eyes will pierce the night.

Reviews

[s y e]

I really like where you took this one, Batman. I would never have thought of anything like this and the way you've written it and presented it is remarkable. You really are a very talented writer.

The story you tell in this poem really hits the reader and you do get your point across. It is something that I could read every single day and never get bored... Honestly amazing!!

[Chris Micha]

Awe Sye, you are so sweet my dear to say that. I am so glad to have your support and you've been a great friend my dear! :)

[s y e]

You've been a great friend to me too! :)

[Sami Khalil]

Celestial in its dimension, earthly in its magnificence. You imaginative eyes are really piercing the night skies...Excellent...:)....................

[Chris Micha]

Wow...thank you my dear! I am so glad you stopped by to see me. I am honored my dear friend!!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly...:)......................

[Baby Ricochet]

Interesting piece. Where I live during the summer months Venus is the brightest object in the night sky other than the moon. Right around the same time Mars seems to blink red. When you look up at night you know why the ancients made such a big deal out of the stars

[Chris Micha]

Man, I bet that is beautiful. Around here with the city lights you don't see anything. I can imagine out in Arizona or New Mexico it's amazing. Thanks my friend!

[MsJewel]

Sad, yet bittersweet - there is beauty to your words
Now guided by
The stars brilliant internal light
Your heart began to shine so bright
So lovely...
You write with emotion, I can feel your words and that is so very appealing!
:) Julie

[Chris Micha]

Awe, thank you so much, Julie. It's truly a pleasure to have to stop by to review my work. :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

This was a lovely write Chris and penned so great.Your lines are fluid and I enjoyed it very much :)

[Chris Micha]

Hola Vidya! Thank you my dear for the wonderful review. Hope you have a great weekend. :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Hola Mr Grey....I meant Christian lol.You are welcome and thank you .I hope you have a great weekend too :)

[Chris Micha]

Haha!!! I needed that :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Lol..............:)

[Bright Ocean Star]

Christian, this is epochly beautiful (ok, I made up that word, but you get the idea...)... I love the whole concept of the warring worlds and the misaligned stars...beautiful. I especially like the following lines:
"Not far behind
The moon and neighboring stars aligned
Joining forces to be by our side"
Wonderful write!

[Chris Micha]

Wow! Thank you for such an amazing review. I know many won't get it, but for the ones who do, it's great. I am truly honored. :)