Transit of Venus

This is probably silly but I had an idea of chaos within our solar system. The close relationship between the Sun & Venus and the protection of their baby (Earth). It can be taken a few ways.

Transit of Venus

On the other side

As the war split the world in two

I let go of your hand and said "Goodbye" to you

I saw your heart

Drifting into the battlefields

Leaving scars that would never heal

From the underside 

My heart ripped my chest in two

Leaping out to come after you

Not far behind

The moon and neighboring stars aligned

Joining forces to be by our side

Just on the edge

Of the gap in-between the world

The moon and stars gave my heart a hurl

It landed hard

In the warring side of the Earth

Drawing swords it began the search

Now guided by

The stars brilliant internal light

Your heart began to shine so bright

With swords in hand

It charged through the dark forces

And with our hearts it stabbed the sorceress

From the dark

I saw you coming back to me

And the stars returning to the galaxy

So from here on out

We will stay closer than we've ever been

Inside me you will hide if it ever happens again

Now,

We'll watch from afar

As she's born into the light

Her blue eyes will pierce the night.

Reviews

[s y e]

I really like where you took this one, Batman. I would never have thought of anything like this and the way you've written it and presented it is remarkable. You really are a very talented writer.

The story you tell in this poem really hits the reader and you do get your point across. It is something that I could read every single day and never get bored... Honestly amazing!!

[Chris Micha]

Awe Sye, you are so sweet my dear to say that. I am so glad to have your support and you've been a great friend my dear! :)

[s y e]

You've been a great friend to me too! :)

[Dancing_Elixir]

I could picture it all as if it played in front of me. Beautiful bae

[Cerise]

OH MY GOSH....dis is exceptionally well written i was wondering before reading what is it gona be about...its a fabulous piece i wish i cud have written lyk dis with such beautiful imagery....well done

[Blue]

Hey, this is interesting and unique. I particularly like the last stanza. Well done, Christian!

[Luna Zerimar]

Beautiful.

..And it isn't silly. It isn't silly at all.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Heroic, reaching for the stars, it's really remarkable traveling with you Chris.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much, Alfred :)

[Honey-Bee]

This is a wonderful poem! The whole poem flows and rhymes so well. Love the read! Good job!

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much, Honey :)

[FallenAngel]

Very wonderful poem. i love this words you chose to use in this poem as well. very imaginative. i can picture the details :)

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much, FA :)

[brian mclaughlin]

well done, i really liked this piece.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much, Brian :)