L.A. Sunset

She's beyond beautiful...

L.A. Sunset

I French kissed the gypsy morning sun
Under sheets of heavy breaths
Rode my lips over peaks of pure pleasure
Down valleys into her depths

Warm-tingling rays touched my vampire-pale skin
As I soared through her undulating skies
A gravitational force attracted my thoughts
Then I heard her energetic cries

Her peak occured at High Noon
I watched with eyes of amazement
And I fell in love with her that day
When she sang her dynamic arrangement

Her body began to grow weary
Trying to keep up with my feverish pace
So she began her magical decent
Down into her hiding place

The day came to a close
And that was the end of her and I
As I watched her set fire to
The horizon of the red-velvet L.A. sky.

Reviews

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

I came back to show
your work some love.


Thank you again for your
Kind Review on Past Ghosts of the Asylum
and thank you for Your Inspiring work anyone
that inspires the write I will let others know
how the write was Inspired.

Just about anything Inspires me that's
all thanks to My lord and Savior but I am
also thankful to be able to read others work.


All I can say is WOW you painted
a beautiful Canvas poem here.


Loved these stanza's lines here.

Her body began to grow weary
Trying to keep up with my feverish pace
So she began her magical decent
Down into her hiding place

The day came to a close
And that was the end of her and I
As I watched her set fire to
The horizon of the red-velvet L.A. sky.


Thank you for sharing. and thank you for
your kind review again. Blessings. Kindred poet


This will go into my General reading

[Chris Micha]

Awe wow! Thank you so very much for that amazing review. It's truly an honor to hear this :)

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

You're very welcome my friend. Blessings. Kindred poet

[Cory Barrett]

beautiful imagery, great write. really enjoyed reading it.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you my friend! Glad you liked it :)

[s y e]

Woweeee, this is something else, my sweet friend. A beautiful, sensual poem... Very hot and not just from the sun, ha! Very passionate, loved the wording and imagery.

You, Batman, are very talented. :D Don't let anyone tell you different.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you sweets. That means a lot! :)

[Glass Heart Inc]

Interesting and exciting.. liked it. Well done :)

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much sweets :)

[Madalyn Beck]

Wowza! This is a beautiful and steamy write. I could see the rising and falling of the sun with the burning passion between two lovers. This line I had to reread probably 3x because I couldn't get over just how it left me wanting: "Rode my lips over peaks of pure pleasure". OH. MY. LANTA.

Fantastic work, Christian! You achieved a beautiful scene that played out before my eyes as I consumed your passionate words. xo (:

[Chris Micha]

Thank you sweet Madalyn! Always love your reviews. Now I know there are some lips out there that wouldn't mind helping you with that! ;)

[Madalyn Beck]

Hahaha! Now you are playing with fire, sir! Always be weary, can you handle the flame? Had to... (;

[Chris Micha]

Hey I dealt with the sun didn't I ;)

[NoelHC]

This is an excellent write Christian, I see you just received your top writer badge, and deservedly so! I am waiting for my rating to go up 0.4 % to get mine.
In your bio you mention that you write at a Grade 5 or 6 level. I disagree with that, there are university grads on here that only wish they could present something so clearly, so well stated, and so moving.
Good job, keep it up.

[Chris Micha]

Wow Noel, you absolutely made my day sir! I can't tell you what that means to me. You will get thete my friend...I have no doubt sir!! :)

[lost girl]

Have you been peeking in my window again? :) LOVE LOVE THIS ONE! into my favorites it goes!

[Chris Micha]

How'd you know?! Shhhh..just don't tell anyone k. ;)~
Thank you my dear!

[lost girl]

I am a french gypsy!LOL

[Chris Micha]

Yes! I knew it ;)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You have penned this brilliantly Chris.Such vivid lines to describe a day from beginning to end and making it seem like the most sinful sex lol

[Chris Micha]

What?! It was the most sinful sex.ever.lol. Glad you liked it my dear...thank you! ;)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Lol......you are welcome :)

[Rose Black]

Adore it ... the personalization is very good... i loved the last part

As I watched her set fire to
The horizon of the velvet-red L.A. sky.

Overall a great poem ...

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much Rose! Always a pleasure ma'am :)

[Rose Black]

Pleasure is all mine =D

[Amber Weldon]

love it! I loved how you combined sex with painting a picture, really gets peoples attention! good work!

[Chris Micha]

Well I'm glad you liked it Amber. I thought I get a few peoples attention with the sex angle ha ;)

[Taylor_McCutcheon]

Nice. I can really feel the relationship there :)

[Chris Micha]

A brief but intense one ;) thank you my dear!

[Taylor_McCutcheon]

No problem :)