L.A. Sunset

She's beyond beautiful...

L.A. Sunset

I French kissed the gypsy morning sun
Under sheets of heavy breaths
Rode my lips over peaks of pure pleasure
Down valleys into her depths

Warm-tingling rays touched my vampire-pale skin
As I soared through her undulating skies
A gravitational force attracted my thoughts
Then I heard her energetic cries

Her peak occured at High Noon
I watched with eyes of amazement
And I fell in love with her that day
When she sang her dynamic arrangement

Her body began to grow weary
Trying to keep up with my feverish pace
So she began her magical decent
Down into her hiding place

The day came to a close
And that was the end of her and I
As I watched her set fire to
The horizon of the red-velvet L.A. sky.

Reviews

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

I came back to show
your work some love.


Thank you again for your
Kind Review on Past Ghosts of the Asylum
and thank you for Your Inspiring work anyone
that inspires the write I will let others know
how the write was Inspired.

Just about anything Inspires me that's
all thanks to My lord and Savior but I am
also thankful to be able to read others work.


All I can say is WOW you painted
a beautiful Canvas poem here.


Loved these stanza's lines here.

Her body began to grow weary
Trying to keep up with my feverish pace
So she began her magical decent
Down into her hiding place

The day came to a close
And that was the end of her and I
As I watched her set fire to
The horizon of the red-velvet L.A. sky.


Thank you for sharing. and thank you for
your kind review again. Blessings. Kindred poet


This will go into my General reading

[Chris Micha]

Awe wow! Thank you so very much for that amazing review. It's truly an honor to hear this :)

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

You're very welcome my friend. Blessings. Kindred poet

[Bright Ocean Star]

I love this Christian! It reminds me of a pilot flying high over mountain tops and into the sunset...beautiful! Suggestive...yes...and may need a mature rating....but undeniably a great write!

[Chris Micha]

Awe...you got it!! Awesome, thank you! :)

[Sami Khalil]

I wish I was in LA for I heard the sunsets are beautiful like this poem. You attract thoughts in your dynamic arrangements...Bravo..............

[Chris Micha]

I can tell you they are an utterly amazing wonder. Thank you my gifted friend!! :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)...................

[Alveron]

You've done it again with the imagery and the emotions flowing between the two people. Great poem

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much Alverton!! Means a lot to me :)

[melissa]

This is amazing poem keep up the great work and keep them coming

[Chris Micha]

Thanks Melissa :)

[melissa]

You're welcome i hope you get all of your poems published because I want a copy of this i love reading them

[Rachelle]

This can only come from the depths of one's soul, Xtian. No fifth or sixth grader here. It's the zoning in that only a person with ADHD can do. We can find magic in anything. Keep on conjuring!

[Chris Micha]

Awe!! That's really sweet of you to say thst Rachelle. You know that means a lot! :)

[Emilia A]

You had me from, "Suggestive? You decide!"
I love that this poem can have many different meanings and I love the beautiful imagery. Lovely poem!

[Chris Micha]

Well I need to use that line more often then. ;) Thank you!! :)

[lissalovesyou]

My oh my. Suggestive? Definitely. I would have had something completely different in my mind if it were not titled LA Sunset;)
Lovely imagery and very passionate. Write on!
lissalovesyou:)

[Chris Micha]

Ha thank you my dear friend. I'm just talking about the sunset don't ya know ;)

[lissalovesyou]

Hehe, sometimes my big imagination gets in the way.
lissalovesyou:)

[Chris Micha]

That's a good thing. I'd rather have too much than not enough!

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes, and I think this is a very steamy piece. It may warrant a warning, to keep the mature rating police off you.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you and I don't want the po-po on me ;)

[Lyn Anderson]

Yes, you don't. Seriously. I ended up with an across the board MATURE rating for a while due to my not labelling suggestive writes.

[Chris Micha]

Wow! They probably hear worse at home :/

[Lyn Anderson]

Oh, I completely agree. Kids that bother to read poetry should be left to read it, I say, but hey, that's just the rules.

[Charmaine Chircop]

Intriguing and beautiful post

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much Charmaine! :)