If I Were You

"If I Were You"

 

If I were you...

 

I'd steal his 67' drop-top candy-apple red Camaro

and race the sun out West

Buy a condo on the beach and sprawl out naked on a California king-sized bed.

...if I were you

 

I'd steal the brightest star from the California kissed night air

Place it on the Hollywood Walk of Fame

and sign it in big-bold f**k you letters saying:

"I can make it anywhere!"

...if I were you

 

I'd steal all of the hearts that's ever done me wrong

and burn them while drinking margaritas sea-side

Listening to an old Jimmy Buffett song

...if I were you

 

I'd sit and reminisce

About someone I truly loved

Piss on those burning hearts

Then crawl back into that California king-sized bed

and quickly call me up

...if I were you.

........

Reviews

[Brook]

Oh how i love the second stanza! Such a very wonderful job. I love the title, and the power in your words. Great job.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much, Brook. I appreciate you stopping by. :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Intriguing to the point that one never feels comfortable in their own skin, well done, good read.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much Thomas for your review.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Your welcome.

[Cory Barrett]

i am always more bold when... i am you. Great write

[Chris Micha]

It's true we are, even behind a mask. Thank you for your review. :)

[Margo Seuss]

This almost has a satire-ish feel to it. If you put yourself into the body of a hollywood star; the shenanigans!! GASP! Powerful words here. Much passion, I do detect. I like the repetition of the phrase 'if I were you.' Repetition adds to drama. And who doesn't love drama!? A great write.

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much, Margo. You always leave such great reviews and I appreciate it!! :)

[Madalyn Beck]

This is a clever write! It got me thinking about what I would do if I was someone else. Hmm, the possibilities are endless! Hahaha! Great job! (:

[Chris Micha]

Well I want to hear what you would do. Should be your next project lol :)

[just Penny]

This is creative and entertaining with an interesting storyline that offers no clue where it's going next. I love the strength in the final stanza. Well done :)

[Chris Micha]

Thank you miss Penny! I am really happy you stopped by! As always I'm honored :)

[Glass Heart Inc]

I am officially a fan of your work 'cause liked a bunch of things you wrote now. Sorry that my reviews lack actual criticism, but I never find any flaws. I am a bit of a grammar freak and I don't hesitate to correct people when I spot mistakes. I don't even have any suggestions for improvements on any of your poems I just always tell you how good they are. In this one, the last verse is my favourite. Great read.

[Chris Micha]

Those are such encouraging words and I really appreciate them. I am honored that you are a fan of my work! Thank you so much!! :)

[lissalovesyou]

If I were you...One always wonders. Now you've got me thinking hard about how different my life could be. I like the way you leave the "you" person's identity a mystery; this allows the reader to make his/her connections. I think this poem shows, hmm...This poem is not easy for me to describe, but I've felt this way before. I think we all have.
I have added this to my favs. and will be rereading for further meaning and better understanding.
lissalovesyou:)

[Chris Micha]

I'm really glad you like it Lisa and thank you for adding it. It's an honor! :)

[redflutterby]

Lol....its fun to think about what we would do if we were someone else. Love this poem....and you know those California king size beds are HUGE!!!! HAHA...;-)

[Chris Micha]

I got lost in one one night, don't ask. Ha! Thanks for stopping by Red! ;)

[redflutterby]

Lmao....never tell a redhead not to ask!!! ;-D
You're welcome...it was my pleasure.

[Chris Micha]

Haha well maybe one day..... ;)

[redflutterby]

Lol... ;-)