SONNET FROM CHRIST....

A POEM DESCRIBING HOW JESUS CHRIST FEELS AFTER HIS SACRIFICE FOR MAN.

I NEVER THOUGHT OF COMING TO THIS EVIL LAND.
I WAS INVISIBLE UNTIL I BECAME SAND.
MY FATHER SENT ME THOUGH IT WAS NOT A COMMAND.
BEFORE THEN, YOU WERE ALL UNCIRCUMCISED INCLUDING THE QUEENS AND KINGS.
I CAME TO FREE YOU OF YOUR JINX.
IT WAS A TASK I HAD TO PERFORM BY ALL MEANS.
I WAS NOT UNAWARE OF THE PAINS I WOULD GO THROUGH.
THE DEBASED ME BECAUSE OF YOU.
I WAS VIRTUALLY NUDE WHEN THEY HANGED ME THAT DAY WHICH WAS  VERY BLUE.
IT WAS MY FATHER'S WISH AND IT CAME TO PASS UNTRAMMELED.
YOU WHOM I FREED WENT BACK AND STUMBLED.
MY FATHER SOMETIMES FEEL I CAME TO TOIL IN VAIN.
I SACRIFICED MY BLOOD FOR YOU AND ALL YOU COULD DO WAS TO SUBJECT ME TO DISDAIN.
YOU HIDE BEHIND THE FACADE OF CELEBRATING ME AND ESCALATE MY PAIN.

Author's Note

A MUST READ

Reviews

[Lady Glitter]

Just beautiful! Loved the staccato-type tempo, and the abc rhyming. Funny though. You skipped the format in lines 10/11, and did ab rhyming only. In reading the poem I couldn't really tell, because it flows so well. It wasn't until I was counting your rhyming lines to be accurate in my statement that I found it. I love the way you bring Jesus to life by attributing feeling to Him that we would have.

Unless you're trying to make a statement, it would be better to disable your CAPS LOCK. It's difficult to read text in all CAPS.