I Love You Very Much

Just another lost love poem.

I love you very much,
but as you did no such
the pain inside my heart
will make us soon depart

If only I did know,
the love that I did show,
would turn upside down,
a smile to a frown

I’ve never felt this way,
you didn’t want to stay,
If only I am smart,
I will let you just depart

Go out into the world,
show how this unfurled
I promise to do my part
and show my broken heart

Now some will say,
you were born this way,
that you didn’t even care,
that I have pain and despair

Now that you are gone,
I will be all alone,
and nothing can compare,
to the love we didn’t share

I loved you very much,
but we go a double dutch
and if you will not care,
I will live my life in despair

Reviews

[mou]

ohh such words took me to my crossed path as well..love it
mou.

[barleygirl]

I like the short cadence of your lines which seems to convey an emptiness rather than being full of emotion . . . this is unusual for a love/loss poem, but interesting & thought-provoking. Your rhyming is a little simplistic for my taste, but it works.

[Valentine]

Sadly not every couple were meant to end up together. I had my husband for years and then God took him. All loss hurts. Nice write. Valentine

[Chris A Jones]

This is true!

[Diamond]

"Now that you are gone,
I will be all alone,
and nothing can compare,
to the love we didn’t share"

This stanza makes it to the missing feeling on the first day after you walk out of that person's life. I like it very much.

[Chris A Jones]

Thank you for reading and reviewing it.

[Lady Glitter]

Love the flip-flop, positive/negative descriptiveness in these lines:
"but as you did no such"
"and nothing can compare,
to the love we didn’t share"

Again simple, easy-flowing rhyming verse. Easy to understand and follow.

[Chris A Jones]

Thank you again for your kind words.

[Kathleen Montgomery]

Very pretty - a very sad, moving piece - a bunch of words mixed together to make a sad romantic thing to come back and read often when reflecting on love and seeing love with its ups and downs from a safe distance - love fully felt by narrator but sadness fully delt by life

[Njeri Brooks]

Although it was a bit depressing, it was a fun read.

Also, there weren't grammar mistakes that jumped out at me.

However, I feel as if this poem did not tell a complete story, and the details were very vague....

On the upside though, I like how you defy all grammar rules by not having a single period marking in this entire poem. It made for an interesting read. Almost like all the words just came flowing out.

[Chris A Jones]

Thanks for taking the time to read it.

[Lana Huskins]

Aw, my. This is sad. :(
Good work though!

[Chris A Jones]

Thanks!
And thanks for taking the time to read it.

[Lana Huskins]

You're welcome :)

[Kathrine Rethorn]

Sad poem about unrequited love, nice flow, read easily. Poor guy/girl!

[Chris A Jones]

Thank you! And thank you for taking time to read the piece.

[Johnson Bobby]

nice words beautiful style sonnet stanza

[Chris A Jones]

Thank you! Thanks for taking time to read the piece.