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My first poem in about eight months!!! Inspiration returns.

exploding hearts leave bleeding tracks,

and autumn went too soon,

now silver streaks seep into cracks

beneath the winter moon,

 

her brilliant, diamond-scattered love

that brightened every day,

now mocks me from its perch above,

she took it all away,

 

so icy tears cut through my face,

while darkness settles in,

there’s nothing left but empty space,

I yearn for spring again.

-CV

Reviews

[DearSweetAgony]

These words are very, very beautiful.
I like I was in Narnia or something, you truly have a way with words.
Flawless job, I enjoyed reading

I love the straightforward rhyming pattern you used. Reminds me slightly of some of the old Australian bush ballads. Excellent job. I adore this, I'm glad to see someone who knows the correct use of "its". Good luck with your writing.

[Elizabeth]

The last stanza really got me... Outstanding!

[deeps]

This is a wonderful piece of poetry here
I like this alot.

[Sean M. Addams]

this piece was just awesome filled with wonderful imagery and the flow was perfect ... overall nice job on this one...fav lines...so icy tears cut through my face,

while darkness settles in,

there's nothing left but empty space,

I yearn for spring again.

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

mmm have you spoken this aloud? i have and it is juicy and delcious to speak. the very simple structure frames some wonderful word choices! i'll be shelving this to reread for sure..

[Naomi Montana Walsh]

ok I confess I only decided to read your poem because your dog is cute..however I really loved the poem the slight rhyme was nice , you know some people over do but there are rest here that I really like and the progression of thought is done well good work I am going to read more of your work and not because of the cute dog either but because it is good.

[Sseoni]

Wow! Wonderful poem! Beautifully written, excellent rhyme scheme, greatly detailed, and descriptive! It had a lot of emotion in it! I loved it! Fantastic poem! :D

[Kelly Scheppers]

Your first poem in eight months...and what an impressive work it is! I always find myself "there", more oft than not. But if works of this caliber is what emerges, than so be it!


My best,
Kelly

[Dezaraye]

This is an absolutely astounding piece. Every line is delivered perfectly and deliberately. I love the imagery and the metaphors you've used. It captured my attention and held it. Absolutely beautiful.