she found me

there i was, chasing swirling tails of love
down frantic, dim-lit alleys under soft,
synthetic mixture of streetlight buzzes
and misty droplets of rain,

my neck craning as i searched for faint,
faint stars nearly washed out by the
all-too-human electric atmosphere that
blankets the city and separates us from
the dark splendor of night.

a tap on my shoulder so gently interrupted
my maniacal and single-minded pursuit,
bringing my body back to earth and
shooting my soul toward the stars,

we exchanged deep stares until her eyes
said yes, then we floated down the alley
together, hand-in-hand, low enough to
stay grounded, but too high to be bothered
by things that were less than spectacular.

-CV

Reviews

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

Wow this is beautiful!
I love the story it tells of having no one but then having someone jsut by the tap on the shoulder!
Absolutily beautiful!!!

[-!katie!-]

simply amazing. I loved it.

[jen -- JG]

Another case of searching so hard for something that we don't see it until it taps us on the shoulder.

Brilliant imagery here, I love the feeling of being low enough to be grounded but still high enough to be free of other uninportant things.

Well done.
Jen-JG

[Carrie Montgomery]

"hand-in-hand, low enough to
stay grounded, but too high to be bothered
by things that were less than spectacular."
loved these last few lines!

[Kara Emily Krantz]

"all-too-human electric atmosphere that
blankets the city and separates us from
the dark splendor of night."

I love this! I copied those lines, but then found myself wanting to copy and paste most of the next two verses, as well. The ending is great. I love how her eyes said yes, and you couldnt be moved by anything less than spectacular, if only for that night. great piece here. :)

hugs

[Isericanormal]

Wow thats all i can type Wow! That was truly amazing. The way it flowed so smoothly together it was like each line was meant to come after the next. It was beautiful and i LOVED the wonderful comparisons.
Excellent Job!!