field of dreams

field of dreams

A Poem by chiisu
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comment please......i am in a kinda depressed mood...

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a field of dreams

crushed by lies

and cracked by broken promises

the darkness in her heart prevails

tonight she lays alone

wondering do you really care

what if i was not here

would you care if i died tonight

would you?

she is lost and alone

in a world she can never make her own

a field of dreams

broken by the lies

cracked by broken promises

alone she is the unknown

in a world that does not want her

A Lost Wonderland

A Field of Dreams.....

© 2009 chiisu


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chiisu
comment please and tell me if i spelled anything wrong...

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Hey. 6th line down just add if after what. there's nothing else spelled wrong. This is so sad, its like a desperat cry for help from your own lips but with the faraway addition of a carachter hurting the same hurt you do.
in a world she can never make her own
love this line.

Posted 15 Years Ago


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chiisu

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