Leaving Rainbows Behind

A short song that I wrote

Leaving Rainbows Behind

Never knew that you’d walk out of my life

 

Before I looked away,

Never thought to say goodbye

 

Now you’re gone and all I do is cry

 

But that’s okay…

On cloudy days it rains

 

That’s when I look out the speeding train

 

Tears seem to fall as

I watch your back get small

 

Soon your memory will disappear

Your image won’t seem so tall

 

Crying won’t be my career

 

You’ll fade away from the corners of my mind

Leaving rainbows behind

 

Author's Note

Just thinking about how even the most painful things fade with time. There's always a rainbow close behind.

Reviews

[Mary Swingler]

I appreciate to the opportunity and blessing of reading and critiquing your work. You emit a sweet innocence and an inner strength. I suspect a strong, loving relationships produced your positive and hopeful heart.
Your skillful use of end rhymes interlaced with internal rhymes forms a euphonious harmony. Your descriptive words evoke vivid images. This is unfortunately, a common situation in society today. Relationships are most important and necessary to everyone. When they are good, they fill our lives with joy and love. When they are bad, they leave us heartbroken.
Thank you for sharing yourself and your writing with us.
The only suggestion I would make is to change That’s when I look out the speeding train to That’s when I look at the speeding trains.
a fellow writer

[Fire Mage Andrea]

It's quite an emotional poem, and it has a positive last line - "Leaving rainbows behind" which seems to mean that happiness and peace of mind is on it's way.

[SparklingYou]

I love this. I perceived it as the person left he would leave sadness but you'd somehow realize that it's not good to dwell on the pain that he left but the sweet memories you have shared. Great write! :)

[Buddhistboy73]

Beautiful imagery here....love the last 3 lines especially......you ever think of getting your songs to an agent? Someone who could put them into the hands of a singer and get them out there?....just a thought.....I enjoyed this one....BB

[Alicia Schroeder]

So true.. Beautifully done.. :)

[~Princess~]

This poem is so ture. When you lose some one their memories stay but there image fades. I love how its all put together. Another perfect poem by you. Great Job my friend. :)

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This is a beautiful poem. I love the way you built the illusions. It was like a trip down the rabbit hole. Superb!

[Poetic Beauty]

I like the last two lines is this poem. Something gray will become something of color and wonder.

[A]

Time heals everything... Beautifully written I totally related to it
Good job!

[K.C. Zbryk]

You captured the thought here perfectly. I loved the image of the speaker riding a train watching someone get smaller. It is a perfect comapirson. I think that was very well put together, and had a wonderful point to make. I cant wait to read more!