Canoe's

broken lives

Canoe’s

 

Only dreams of white lace

Covering my face

Ran through my brain

Seven years ago when

I booked our bridal room

When you asked to be

My groom

 

I chose a secluded place

High up inside

The limbs of soaring trees

Surrounded by chirping birds

And bright green leaves

 

Where you would

Say your vows to me

At Canoe's on the

Chatahoochee River

 

Now only rain and

My warm salty

Teardrops fill that

Vacant space now

 

God sent a flood

And washed it

All away

 

The very day

You decided

To forever

Stay away

From me

 

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

That would be a great place to say your vows... what a heartbreaking ending.

[Ruth]

I felt every word of this! Beautiful love...made me feel such remorse and beauty at the same time..you sure know how to reach the heart! :) xx

[Thea]

"God sent a flood
And washed it
All away"
I love this part! :)))
Filled with great emotion...Sad but really well crafted... :)))

[Yari Garcia (Older Prof..]

It started so beautiful, then ended so sadly...

[Rene Velez]

Great write Marie...stunning words...

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This poem filled my heart and pulled me right in. You had me emotionally invested so easily. The sights and sounds where heavenly. As I watched them all fade away and saw her walking alone in the cold wind...bundled up in her sweatshirt...
I got a little choked up.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

Sad and well written...
The title fits so brilliantly with the poem!

[M Garcia]

Excellent write, but sad. Keep it up.

[Tina Kline]

Very sad poem. Very gripping too. This is great, I really like it.

[Jibey]

Sad but powerful lament...