Awaken Me

my love for ballet dancing and playing the cello

Awaken Me

Deep chords

Of a solemn cello

Chiseling swiftly up

And down the scales

Stir raw emotions

Asleep in me

 

Gliding my feet

Back and forth

Swiftly, like a

Hummingbird just

Learning to fly

 

My satin toes

Make rhythmic

Thrusts against

The hardwoods,

As my arms

Soar through

The air

 

Strings

Of the cello

Overtake

Me

 

They cast

Their spell on

My spirit

 

Rich tones

Stoke the glowing

Embers of my

Soul

Reviews

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oh wow..beautiful marie

[Thea]

What a very beautiful write, Marie...You know, I'm amazed by talented dancers... :)))
'Cause I'm not a good one...Haha!

[The Brokenheartist]

Beautiful! Written like a piece of cello music, I could hear the notes. Part of playing music, is knowing what not to play. Although to the listener it seems fluid and continuous, there are actually rests and stops; places where nothing is being played. These are indicated by symbols much like punctuation. I think your poem would have more of a musical impact if we knew when to pause for effect. Periods, commas, and semi-colons are our friends. Also, I like the fusion of your two passions - cello and dancing. I think this poem could be strengthened by alternating each stanza with the other passion--like stanza one begins with the cello music, stanza two is the dancing, then stanza three is about the music, and stanza four is more dancing. When using stanzas in poetry, sometimes patterns are important, just as they are with writing song lyrics. But that's only a suggestion; take it or leave it. I really like your word choices!

[M Garcia]

Beautiful. Wonderful write. Thanks for sharing these two loves.

[Bridgette's Ink]

This is beautiful, you can really understand your love for ballet and cello. Amazing

please read my work and comment

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Wonderful imagery, I can pretty much picture a ballerina in my head reading this. Beautifully written. Great write!

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This is ever so beuatiful and wonderful.
A most enjoyable read.

[Alysa]

I'm a dancer myself. So I understand all of this. Great work.

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem. I like to watch a talented dancer. They can steal your thoughts and mind with perfect moves in a dance. Description create a good vision. Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Beautiful music to dance by, love the imagery!