Forever Damned

A blood splatter

Forever Damned

Traces of your heart

Brand my soul tonight

Like a dagger

Driven deep below

Gasping for air to breath

As blood runs down my neck

One bite and

I was eternally forsaken

Forever damned

Reviews

[LittleMissSunshine :)]

Loved this! The title and last lines are horribly confusng. You're trying to be mysterious, but just coming off as confusing...

[The Analog Kid]

You do have quite the knack for packing a powerful punch (or should I say bite) in few words!

[Coyote Poetry]

In a few words. Told a complete story. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[M.Babu]

Your brevity always says so much more!!!

Lovely read...

~M.Babu~

[Michael of Gilead]

Nice Marie, i would change below to into...and watch who you give your neck to ;)

[KAREN]

Great work here, very deep and intense. A great chilling to the bone write!

[anne p. murray- LadeeAn..]

Intense and right to the point...one deadly bite. Great work

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Good job..!!

[Patches I'm not so new..]

WoW! This is chilling, intense, vivid and very much to the point (or is that two points?)