Death Wish

A deadly poem

Death Wish

 

Really, I don’t hold many grudges

But tonight I wish you were dead!

 

Lifeless,

With your pasty white tongue

Hanging out,

And your dull eyes

Rolled-up in the

Back of your hairless head!

 

I’m willing to offer

You my forgiveness

Or at least I'll try,

As long as you

Are toes-up and

 No longer alive!

 

I’m your angry 

Black Magic Mama

Now I’m going to

Cast a nasty spell

That will cause

Your body to quickly swell-up

Rot and smell

 

Because you were no Officer

nor a Gent to me

Soon your life will be bloody spent!

 

Bulls-eye!!!

With any luck,

My love,

You’ll die a painful death tonight

Looking directly into my baby blue eyes!

 

Say your last prayers

Make all of your amends

Prepare to die

Time to kiss

Your worthless life goodbye!

 

 

 

Author's Note

Letting off a little steam. Ha!

Reviews

[Linear]

Phew, glad I ain't bald yet.
Another good piece of writing from a girl who knows how :0)

[Michael of Gilead]

Btrings up an interesting point, when the object of your personal persicution is helpless, we seem to be too quick offering our compassion to then.....

[Thea]

This is soooo powerful, Marie!!! I can feel the emotions! So strongly said! :)))

[The Analog Kid]

Damn. Powerful, and slightly amusing too. Rock on...

[sugar]

ok your pissed off hahahah, feel sorry for who ever that person is, and i have felt these feelings many times befor so you did a great job explaining them:)

[Sbernie18]

Really like this. Seems pretty obvious someone hurt you, to probably say the least. Writing is always one of my favorite ways to blow off steam. I agree with jupiter* a few more metaphors may have characterized and shown the audience how you felt a little better. Nonetheless..good write.

[Jupiter Jazz]

So yeah.. You're pissed. You're anger comes out quite clearly in this. I would've like if you used more metaphors tho, but good job

[tynamite]

"I'm willing to offer my forgiveness ... as long as you're not alive." What a line.

[?]

oh Marie, you scare me. lol
I love this, very powerful piece. You have written this one with fire!!

[Chris]

Nibbles and bits...

Chris