Pelagic Pleas

a haiku

Pelagic Pleas

Riptides force me down

Gasping for breath of flesh gain

Barnacles taunt me

 

Shark fins writhe and pitch

Mermaids of the sea circle

King Neptune redeems

 

Author's Note

Something different for me

Reviews

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

Nice one!

And the ocean...an interesting thing to write about.

:)

[sugar]

very unique, i agree...i liked it

[?]

Excellent
Like the last one the best, Love the King Neptune redeems

[Chris]

Two unique Haiku's

The second one totally stand alone.

Chris

[Thea]

Truly unique! I love it... :)))

[Coyote Poetry]

A complete story in so few words. The ocean can create great story and myth. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Becky C Strukamp]

Love it. Refreshing and alive.

King Neptune redeems. (like an awakening) excellent

[MS. BABy]

VERY DIFFERENT INDEED, I LIKE THE PHOTO WITH THE PIC...

[OT]

different but good! I like it - well used 5-7-5 here - nice!