Earth's Temptress, Lady Fire

A scorching poem

Earth’s Temptress, Lady Fire

Gyrating in her haunting

And violent shapes

To some evil melodic beat

 

Raging and roaring

This hot tempered beast

 

Restless heart

Of searing flames

 

She’s come to savagely

Lick the damned

Scorch the oppressed

 

She’s constantly

Twisting and contorting

As she sizzles and pops

 

Her temperature rising,

Melting mighty steel

Into small liquid pools

And bursting thick beer bottles

Into tiny shards of glass

 

She’s a raving b***h to handle

A wicked siren

That’s out of control

 

She’ll kick leagues

Of men in the a*s

When trying to quench

Her undying thirst

 

She’s a blaze of fire

Earth’s precious temptress

Lady element of heat

Mistress of Fire

Author's Note

I wrote this for the fire contest
I love to watch fire.
Fire relaxes me and takes me to another world.

Reviews

[M.Babu]

This was a really engaging piece Marie!

Loved everything about it...from the subtle rhyme to the short stanzas, the wonderful in depth description, the imagery, and the feeling packed in each stanza.

Honestly you fully encroach on fire's two personalities her terrible rage to her subtle useful qualities. And the transitioning was well thought out...this is truly a talented write and i'm glad i read this today :D

Great stuff!!

~M.Babu~

[Mauricio Montoya]

great write as always.

[daydreamer]

wow that was fiery hot. this is a different kind of writing i have come across. good work keep it up

[Brenden Moran]

First off, presentation is the first battle in attracting readers to your poem, try perhaps a smaller font, although I do believe the red does it justice. Secondly, lines are not usually randomly placed between sentences, and often times, in this poem, I was lost in what you were saying because they weren't complete thoughts. Try adding a little more of a rhythm into your lines so it's easier on the reader. Thirdly, there are a few times where you rabbit trail on some seemingly odd topics. I thought you did well with just talking about the fire before you went off on other trails. Overall, it's well written, but I'd label it as prose, not a poem, based on its style, rather than presentation.

[Shep]

That exsplains the red. Loved the poem and how the words were true to themselves. Nicely done.

[M Garcia]

Great write. Hope you won.

[The Perfectionist]

I really have nothing to say on this one, which is a good thing for you. There's nothing to complain about here, and I'm not the sort of person that gets gripped by poetry, so I can't exactly say I enjoyed it, but it was well and cleverly written, so well done.

[Short.Nerd]

I love the description to this! I always use to love watching fire when I was younger.

[Dream Weaver]

One word pyromania, I kid you Marie.
I can see why fire relaxes you after
reading this..Nicely done...

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Imagination at a new peak..!!