First Born

A relative poem

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

First Born

Don’t you want to know me, to understand?

Why do you keep pushing me to a distant land?

 

Don’t you know my heart is soft?

Just a smile and a hug from you, and it would lift off.

 

I’m made of flesh, bone and water

Don’t you remember me? I’m your first born daughter.

 

 

Reviews

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Love the way you can write a poem with so few words and build it up to a strong powerful meaning!

[KAREN]

Beautiful write and very strong and powerful!

[SpokenWord]

I was the only child and never experienced this but heard others talk about it. Very strong poem, to the point with great points. I wonder if parents know their first born can feel this way. Great writing.

[prim]

wow....sad, very powerful, and unfortunately, very true.

[Jibey]

Makes its point...

[AloysiaVerben]

A stong, powerful piece :) I love this.

[Arsenic Nemesis]

Wonderful, a very strong piece indeed, I loved it. And that last part was just stunning, rendering one speechless in fact. Great job, keep it up~

[M.Babu]

"I’m made of flesh, bone and water
Don’t you remember me? I’m your first born daughter."
This line just did it for me. There was great emotion in there and i felt its powerful resonance. I reaaaaallly liked this piece. Good one!

[Akshat♥]

sad poem..i can easily relate to it..
in this life people wear different masks to hide them..
really nice poem:)

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Wow. This poem has such compassion.
Beautiful work!