First Born

A relative poem

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

First Born

Don’t you want to know me, to understand?

Why do you keep pushing me to a distant land?

 

Don’t you know my heart is soft?

Just a smile and a hug from you, and it would lift off.

 

I’m made of flesh, bone and water

Don’t you remember me? I’m your first born daughter.

 

 

Reviews

[♥(heatherawesome..]

This is sad and this is a beautiful poem soo keeeeeeepppppp it up and keep writing.

[Tina Kline]

Nothing more painful then feeling like your being overlooked and forced to draw attention to yourself.

[The Analog Kid]

Sometimes, being a first born can feel like a liability. Nice sentiments...

[Abbie]

very emotional keep up th good writing :)


100/100

[Alicia™]

This is such a deep poem and the emotions really show through. Wonderfully written.

[Mauricio Montoya]

this piece deep is and strong in it massage how can a mother turn away from any of her children? it's beyond me.
Excellent write.

[Poetic Beauty]

The last line is like driving a knife through the heart. Quite a sad tale that has been woven into this poem.

[Dilan Gray]

While this poem is short it is full of emotion. I love how you describe the feelings of the daughter, her pain. I think you wrote this really well. Great poem!

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful message in the poem. It is sad we separate from the people we love. World create separation that need strong bridges to connect friends and family. A very good poem with some wisdom to be learn. We need to keep in contact with the good people we love in a life. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[JanieB]

Few words of meaning. Nice write.