Savage Raping Of A Queen

A poem of brutality

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Savage Raping

Of A Queen

 

Our serene

Haitian Queen,

        Surrounded

By the warmest

Aqua blue water,

Your people stagger To their feet

With dismay and Emptiness

In their eyes.

 

 

Trying to understand the squalor

And stench of death that’s cursed

Your beautiful land.

 

 

Mother Nature’s

Powerful force has

Struck your

Angelic face,

Like the balled fist

Of a mighty

Drug czar.

 

 

Your bronze 

Earthen plates

Appear as if you’ve

Seized and twisted stubbornly

In a disheveled bed.

 

 

Violently protesting

The powerful hands,

That tied your sinewy

 Arms to the bedposts,

To savagely 

Rape you.

 

 

With greed and lust

In their hungry eyes

As they

Disgraced you.

 

 

 

They stole from you all of your

Beauty and plunder That your Gracious Mother Blessed

 You with at

Your birth.

 

 

How your creator,

Hangs his head

In sorrow now.

 

 

Like a hostile father,

He seeks revenge,

His mind spins with Questions,

As he blames

Himself.

 

 

Where did I go wrong?

 

 

Why wasn’t I more

Protective of my Cherished

Caribbean Princess?

 

Reviews

[ivizarx]

can draw lots of inferences from this subject...
main one though is the common "man are evil, and women are victims"....

my true thought of the subject is nothing close to the sort as people exaggerate it as (which is common as the subject you present here in the poem). if we are talking about the flaws of genders, it would be this which I am referring to: "Men are Cruel and Savage, while Women are Goodhearted and Victims of life"...
but the truth in my perspective is: "Men are Mischievous, and Women are Devious". and that's something which can be turned into fact and can be pointed out even here in this poem, even though it's something which you tried to avoid to sustain a reputation for women, but the truth is humanity all together is savage. don't take sides of which is better else you become no better than a racist :/ that's of course if this poem is about genders in the first place (also, no judgement upon your character, but just of that of the poem).

Assuming this poem is about government now, then yes, truly government is a corrupt piece of work which launches it's invasion of army ants to colonize another's land. It is possible however to have "good" government as long as it remains in the hands of people and not of an individual few, which is nonexistent in modern day (except for possibly a few tribes in South Africa and South America). Freedom is something I am a big advocate for, and happy to see that this poem also shines a light on that through the enslavement and humiliation of others. That may not be an idea or theme which was really originally conceived in conception, but it is existent in the poem.

As for the poem itself, not much is needed, I might consider suggesting working on free style some more if you intend on writing it, for it could use a little work. However it is a great job indeed and well done, especially if you haven't wrote poems such as this very often (which i would not know for I as of yet haven't scrolled through what you have uploaded)...
I welcome to see more from you ^_^

[Abbie]

WOW Thats interesting thats kinda different from your other writings but still very good

[Michael of Gilead]

Interesting...too bad everyone who showed up at first hasn't stuck around to finish anything....and too bad the government is so corrupt and useless as to let it's people suffer so...it is a raping

[Norma M Sutton]

A interesting comparison.

[Liza]

the vulnerability and beauty of a woman's anatomy savage men take and disown

[Mauricio Montoya]

sad piece, nice work.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

(speechless)

100!

[HopelesslyDevoted]

very powerful and somewhat frightening

[Jessica]

Your poem is quite......ambiguous, deep and meaningful.it is so emotional!i enjoy it so much!I "wow"ed after I read your poem. it is sooo sad and tragic but captivating. it is so amusing! great work! Keep it up!

[Tina Kline]

What a very sad and tragic story but very captivating.