Leaves of the Day

A poem about various forms of leaves

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Leaves of the Day

 

Golden leaves on an oak tree blow, falling to the earth

At leave, a soldier heads to port ready to greet the ladies

Losing my busy job leaves me restless with nothing to do

Leaves of a family table make room for more guests to feed

When you choose to leave me, my heart will bleed without you

Finally I'm leaving my dreams of you behind, to pursue my own

Goodbye, my love, goodbye...watch as I leave

Author's Note

Found myself pondering the other day in the shower about all the diffrent uses of the word leave. Couldn't shake the thought. Let me know what you think

Reviews

[deeps]

Now this is simply amazing, I loved this. The image is breathless.
So very well written, enjoyable font to protray the emotions.
Well done!

[tynamite]

Whoa this is too much. I've favourited it.

[Linear]

Well I just leafed through your poem, watched as the oak leaves fell, thought about turning over a new leaf, but the leaves of the pages in my book are quite stuck and the leaves of my mind have pictures of you inscribed in perfect detail as you muse behind the leaves of your shower curtain.

[Cynthia]

What a outstanding poem! This is one of my fav poem! Really, goodbyes is surly heart breaking and I remember so much once I read your poem! You have go through the word 'goodbye' so well, and you have written lots of meaning of goodbye! I so love it!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like how you weaved this poem. With gentle words took me on a journey of sadness and a goodbye. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[JelliFyshKissUs]

Superb... When a thought like that festers in your brain, you can't let it go to waste. Hmmm.... I wonder what I can do with the word "waste". Nope, would work--two different spellings. See, now you've got ME thinking :)

[E.H. Monroe]

The leave, leaf play works the whole damn thing. This is a skilled version of quick snapshots from some sort of table, all moving in the motion of passing leaves.
This creates a story, almost like the subject knows HER soldier is going away to do god knows what and she can bear to be in the place where she can get the best visual...
A lot to think about. This goes beyond just the use of the word.

Nice work

[Poetic Beauty]

I understand the repetitiveness of the word leaves in this poem but with it being a shorter piece in my opinion I found it a bit distracting for it was really noticeable. The imagery in the poem is beautiful and it is easy to follow.

[D.J. Lutz]

I have never been a poetry guy, until I started reading your work. This, along with your other pieces, make poetry understandable, at times fun, and thought provoking for me. As for this one, very nice technique on a word; I may have to try it sometime!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

What an intelligent and creative way you connected the different uses of the word.


When you choose to leave me, my heart will bleed without you

Finally I'm leaving my dreams of you behind, to pursue my own

Goodbye, my love, goodbye...watch as I leave


I love the ending.