Loves Bitter Tale

A salty dog lover's sea tale

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

- Love’s Bitter tale -

 

Love’s grown icy,

Bold As a northern

seas Mighty gale

 

Lover’s sweet tales

Have long since sailed

 

Where hot raging fires

Once danced and devoured

Dense, hearty wood

Only an empty charred

Pit remains

 

Bittersweet dreams

Of yesterday haunt and seize

At crack of dawn

 

Gentle tears roll and flow

As violent sobs are drawn

 

 

Holding Back 

A tumultuous

Flood of emotions

That Her fragile

levee contains

 

Till morning bluebird

Sings her Ginger 

morning dew song

 

Lifeless lovers

Repressing the

Passing of

A passion

That has

Since passed

Along

 

Leaving hearts flaccid

And bodies

Too frigid to hold

 

At Last

Their love has

Grown cold

 

 

 

Reviews

[sarah]

this is so sad! but such a great write!

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This was murky and dark. The feelings of it all are violent...
as each line hits harder than the one before. You went to
a place we dont like to admit exists. Even in the sorrow and
depressing sights..it is beautiful writing. I was thoroughly
entertained and equally impressed by the vast range of your
writing abilities.

[OT]

very nice!! light hearted and harmonious, a strong song like rhythm riding through it!!

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

This is beautiful! My favorite lines: "Gentle tears roll and flow
As violent sobs are drawn."
This is almost melodic as KL said.

[KL]

Melodic. Almost reads as a lullaby despite its contrasting nature. Very nice.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Till morning bluebird
Sings her Ginger
morning dew song

Wow what a melodic way with words... love can freeze a heart and melt it too, that is what makes it so mysterious.

[Robin]

sigh, the sad song of the ashen heart ..

[Arsenic Nemesis]

A nice amount of depth and emotion in this, and it's really well written and presented. As always, great job, keep it up!~

[Gone]

Lifeless lovers Repressing the Passing of A passion That has Since passed Along. So, so sad. I have seen this too many time before. I just than God that my relationship with my wife is moving the opposite way. What a thought provoking poem. brings me close to tears.

[Nights Tale]

u write good an its quite sad bt i like it xNTx