On Ice

A poem about driving on ice.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

On Ice

The slick uncertainty of ice

        Not knowing how to throw the dice

 

To turn into the spin                  or tap the brakes

            Fishtail and        hope for the best is all it takes

 

                     When the donut time comes

                                  My heart double thumps

           What a mess it makes!

 

But times like that are so fun

                    You hope it happens twice

 

Life is pins and needles

When you tap dance on the ice.

 

Author's Note

Tonight I had to drive on black ice. I didn't have problems until I got into my apartment complex parking lot. That's when the fun began. There were cars every where, kids and people walking around. My car was fishtailing and skidding. I was scared to death but excited at the same time. Made me want to go do donuts in a safer and desolate parking lot like I used to like to do. I live on a huge hill, it was really difficult for me to get into my tight parking space. I barely made it in. Tomorrow I'll try to jog on it! Ha!

Reviews

[Mauricio Montoya]

great job.

[Dark Empress]

Very good. I love this. It is by far one of my favorite. :)

[Linear]

Well done both with the poem and your parking, and it is so much fun to slip and slide

[Michael of Gilead]

Always turn into the skid...

When stopped, go to your trunk where you have a bag of kitty litter and scatter that for traction ;)

[hannajade]

Good one!!:D

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Elegant words.
The fear, anxiety and excitement were all here.

[Solidad]

I think this is one of may favorites of yours. Its formatted quite beautifully, the way it lays on the page aggressive like skid marks but just as graceful and solid as that inspired you. J'adore =)

[Alicia™]

I don't think I've ever read rhyming poems from you, so that was definitely interesting. I really liked the concept of it, and I think the first and last stanza really summed up the poem; the perfect start and finish! I have to ask, though: why didn't you rhyme the last two stanzas?

PS. What's black ice? I've never heard of it before...

[Arsenic Nemesis]

Wow, wonderfully written and presented mortal! I love it! Very good writing here indeed, and the layout relates to the given topic very well. Yes, ice is a barrel of laughs, we've recently had our fair share of it over here; thankfully the power of the sun has melted it all so no more slipping - for NOW apparently more is on the way, woo~ But yes, amazing work once again mortal, well done~~~

[Jibey]

Some thrills lead to messy spills...