Death Bed
A Poem by Marie Harrison
A dying moment. 

Death Bed
Lucid moments came
His loved ones
Surrounded him,
His final hour passed.
© 2010 Marie Harrison
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Bugger, wonder what he said in his final lucid moments?
Posted 14 Years Ago
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/nice, but lose the semicolon, and make
the word surrounded, not surrounding. :-)
Posted 14 Years Ago
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Very sad but comforting too because love ones surrounding him!
Posted 14 Years Ago
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This is very good but very sad. But not too many people have loved ones around them when they pass.
Posted 14 Years Ago
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I was intrigued by the caption on the cartoon... 'ridin dertay' - does it mean what I am thinking? Maybe he was dying in hope...
Posted 14 Years Ago
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breathtaking really, it has a subtler impact that speaks volumes,
you have a knack for for crafting, stunning, powerful job :)
Posted 14 Years Ago
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Greatly put into words.
Posted 14 Years Ago
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Its sad to see a loved one staring at whats
on the other side. Nice work.
Posted 14 Years Ago
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Sounds like a happy enough death. Nice use of the word. In fact, perfect use of the word (in my book, anyway).
Posted 14 Years Ago
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I like this one.
Posted 14 Years Ago
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Marie HarrisonAtlanta, GA
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Momma told me to get out and enjoy life, so now I'm going to dance.
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