Carry Me Away

A poem of elation.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Carry Me Away

Banging of the drums,

The cry of the electric guitar,

Breathes life into my fire tonight.

 

These electric currents seize through

My body constantly.

 

I get lost in the music,

Lost in your eyes,

As you make my hips rise.

 

 

Reviews

[Dream Weaver]

Short simply put and speaks volumes...

[Akeen V.]

sounds sexy ha.

[Short.Nerd]

Good job.

[FlawedByDesign]

Nice incorporation of music and sex. I like that you have personalized it and told of "him". There are so many subtleties and links between a musical performance and sex; and while brief, you've captured it in this short write.

The only thing that does not sit with me for some reason, is the word "constantly", I think you can do better here.

Well done.

[sarah]

my friend would adore this poem good workd!

[Cynthia]

Great Poem!
I love your poems always, how nice is it!
Love this

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Behold the magic of music. This was a spellbinding glimpse into the
underworld of the imagination. I wanted to simply watch the events
take place, but I was carried away by the emotions. The power of
your words make it hard to not let go.

[TAO]

mmm mmm mmm. Sex and music, ambrosia when they combine powers (at least, in the right setting). Beautiful work, again. You're very good, and it's striking that, though you are so brief at times, you get what you have to say across without fail.

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sensual and sexy and lively poem..great

[Steve]

Hmmmmmmmmm. :0)

Sounds eletric!